Salvation

Salvation

A Poem by Jamila
"

Deliverance from harm.

"
Here
on my
Dolorosa
heart bleeds
upon the
stone
struck blind
by my own
Judas
I shuffle
on
alone
pierced love
necrotic memories
lie
in a
Golgotha
of decaying
bone
no charge
of roses
Calvary
will let
your soul
atone
for the
Roman rage
in blink of
eye
that nailed
me down
to
crucify
so
beg in
prayer
on bended
knee
under my
thundery
sky
raining
purity
for there
will
be
no
resurrection
come the
dawn
for
you
and
me.

© 2020 Jamila


Author's Note

Jamila
Thanx for reading! :) Blessings and Happy Easter to all.

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A very sad poem indeed. Looks like you have been jilted in love. Forget the Judas who stabbed you and forget the necrotic, Golgotha memories. You're an attractive girl and there are many fish in the lake. My advice is just move on. That's the best answer you can give such deceivers. Happy Easter to you too.

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, Pestonjee! Not so much jilted, as tilted! You stay safe and well in these troubled ti.. read more



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As soon as you see the name, Judas, you know betrayal is just around the corner.
Mind you, you do say the Judas is yourself which conjures up self-betrayal.
This is actually more powerful than finding out the other party has betrayed you.
Now the question is. How many would admit this betrayal to themselves.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paul Bell

1 Week Ago

You didn't nail this Judas to the cross, did you.
Jamila

1 Week Ago

No. Just kicked his a*s out of my life!
Paul Bell

1 Week Ago

Lol, you did good, girl.
I can feel the pain in this, this write flows very well. awesome

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Week Ago

Thanx so much, Kay-T. I appreciate your comments. Thanx for reading! :)
Can feel the pain emanating from this piece... has a great flow of emotions... We should pray for everyone's safety and good health... Things will come on track one day... Amazingly written... Thanks for sharing !!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, Abhishek. This one is more personal but I agree the world needs as much divine interv.. read more
I loved every word and thoughts. The feel of a Dante Inferno ride in the words dear Jamila. The question of rebirth. A everlasting question that one day we will find out, true or not? Outstanding use of words dear Poet.
Coyote

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

4 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear Coyote! I adore the works of Dante, so your words here make me very happy! Rebi.. read more
Coyote Poetry

3 Weeks Ago

You are welcome dear Jamila.
A poem of betrayal. The pain that betrayal brings is immense. Many of us have had a Judas in our lives. You don't forget them, even if you get over them. This intelligent poem can be read on several levels. I hope dear Jamila you had a happy Easter in lockdown. Keep safe and well.

Chris

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, Christine! Yes, that Judas appears in many places, the scoundrel! My Easter was fine... read more
Something simple can be powerful and emotional. Had a lot of depth to this poem, really enjoyed reading this. Thanks.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, Ben! Glad you enjoyed this poem! Many thanx for the appreciation! Stay safe and well!.. read more
A very powerful poem, Jamila. The resurrection metaphor is quite impacting in the sense that when juxtaposed against the resurrection of Christ, the event described here becomes that much more bleak and painful. Because Christ rose again, but in your poem universe, the death is final. Of course, this death of relationship is warranted. The abuser does not deserve further chances or opportunities to hurt.

So, for me, your ending was empowering. The hurt is done, and as described here it is quite a life-changing moment. A moment of suffering and death for the speaker that may itself be resurrected for a lifetime. But the power to protect oneself remains and in refusing forgiveness or a fresh start for the abuser, the speaker holds on to the power to continue and also the power within the self to heal.

Your metaphor is well carried. This scene is so well-known (the death and resurrection of Christ) that there automatic connections for so many of us. What I found compelling about the poem is that it manages to maintain the visceral connection to the Biblical narrative while also opening up new pathways where the bones of the story weave into the personal narratives of our lives.

Great work by you. Though poems on this topic are never easy to read, you present the story with strength and grace.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, dear Eilis! This was just one poem inspired by the current holidays and one in which .. read more
I had a Judas in my life too, my friend. I understand the Golgotha you have been in. May the dawn bring you not the resurrection of what was but a new hope of a beautiful life ahead. Love yourself always! Happy Easter!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, dear Rania! Seems that Judas sure does get around! Have a lovely Easter and stay off .. read more
what a very bleak way to describe Easter, Jamila, a very personal view, with some great poetic lines, not the happiest poem I have read but it did raise a smile, so well done,

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, dear gram! More like just Easter allegory for a personal moment of suffering. I guess.. read more
gram linski

1 Month Ago

Happy Easterus back at you, take care,
Very appropriate imagery for this day here. The Good Friday references are numerous, but they are symbolic of a personal betrayal and emotional crucifixion. Roman rage is particularly revealing. I'd say this Pilate was extremely abusive in some way. Whatever, it's over now. The stone is just not gonna roll.

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, dear John! You have nailed your review here.....no pun intended! That stone is defini.. read more

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Tags: Poetry, Good Friday, crucifixion, rage, abuse, Christ, relationships

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