Quills, Brushes & Cellblock Hushes

Quills, Brushes & Cellblock Hushes

A Poem by Jamila
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Smart of the Art

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My words
these
crooked felons
hang
like a Kahlo
monobrow
upon the pages
of my canvas
revolting me
to
scowl
petty thieves
without
conviction
airbrushed
emotions
without a
plea
that in
my mind's
own
Alcatraz
they always
painted
like
Renoir
to
me.


© 2020 Jamila


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Jamila
Thanx for reading! :)

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Hmm....meow....I was passing through and stopped dead in my track to see words accused of such felony! Wow! This is indeed new to me! Can words that crop up or pop up on our poetic canvas feel so revolting sometimes? Indeed, the first instinct is to revolt and reject those words if they don't fit into our poetic scheme of things, yet it's the astute poet who would take a step back and give those unconventional outpourings of his mind another look and its here that I find your reference to the Kahlo Monobrow most fascinating, especially in the context used here. Often, what seems unconventional or repulsive at the first glance can turn out to be something unique, original and so very attractive on a closer look. So why force ourselves to stick to the oft-beaten, run-of-the-mill thinking when all we really need to do is to embrace the beauty of our own minds? I often see poets and writers here making this blunder. Of not being original, of repeating what seems popular themes and metaphors, of copying one another's styles instead of delving into what their own minds could offer them. And in doing this, we are not offering the reader any new, exciting vistas but merely airbrushing stale, oft-recycled and imitated art. It's a pity as theres such potential lurking below the surface, the subconscious. Sadder still, to the prisons cell-blocks that are our minds, these lame offerings seem like Renoirs. How delusional can we get?
One of the reasons I think the footfall at the Cafe has reduced so much in recent times. Meow meow Jamila, I really love where you took me with your words, you lovely and brilliant poetess you! Thanks for posting again! 😻💖 Mwaaah!

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Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, Ms Kat! Wow. A wonderfully in depth review! You have shown me an entire new angle to .. read more
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

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Welcome, dear Jamila, you have been such a beautiful addition to our cafe. At the time you joined, .. read more



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Freda always freaked me out:/ she is at once repulsive and beautiful at the same time. It wasn't till after I really examined her that I saw beauty... much like your examination of the ugly from our hearts in composition do we find a hidden beauty obscured by prerequisite

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Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear Robert! The Frieda monobrow always freaks me out! Yet her Art and strength is fu.. read more
Wow this is right up my alley
My friends that know me on here know I love art in poems I’ve written a few myself and particularly love yours well done 👍

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Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, Julie! I enjoy using references to Art and Artists in my poetry at times, also. Depen.. read more
Wonderful use of words dear Jamila. Us, who love to write. Like Hemingway wrote. We must bleed to paper our heart and soul. I liked the flow of thoughts, left something for the reader to think about. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

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Coyote Poetry

3 Weeks Ago

I was glad I met you dear Jamila and I didn't know. Hemingway wrote standing-up. You are welcome and.. read more
Jamila

3 Weeks Ago

It is actually a 1999 post humous publication of his final discovered manuscript. "True At First Lig.. read more
Coyote Poetry

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Somehow the old Hemingway books are coming out. Thank you Cuba. His home in Cuba had thousands notes.. read more
I get a real feeling of displeasure at the words that on occasions are written which do not do justice to our creative thinking. It happens. It happens to me a great deal. I feel sure many poets will relate to your thoughts here Jamila. We are always our own worse critics. Keep safe and well my friend. A wonderful poem.

Chris

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Jamila

4 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear Chris! It does get quite annoying when we stumble on a brilliant idea yet cannot.. read more
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Christine Anne Shaw

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All safe and staying at home. I have to say I have appreciated my garden more in the last month than.. read more
I might be wrong, but what I am getting here is a dissatisfaction with some written effort, maybe poetry. It is as though the speaker is displeased with the finished product on the page, which doesn't live up to the way it sounded in the mind. The prison imagery is a good way of expressing the frustration felt when such disappointments occur and no immediate remedy is handy. Loved the Frieda Kahlo simile.

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Jamila

4 Weeks Ago

Thanx so much, dear John! Again, your review is right on the money. Sometimes what we have in mind j.. read more
also love the alliteration in the title.

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Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx, J. I thought the title was a little quirky but i decided to stick with it. Hopefully it makes.. read more
I like the double meaning of conviction...words of the poet lacking it, but also words of conviction that are imprisoned for telling the truth, touching a nerve.
I want to plead guilty, i need to plead guilty...I often feel my words are felonious because they come to me as if i am a conduit...i almost feel i plagiarize everything i write....steal it out of thin air.
Arrest me, and I will go peacefully....just hope i can have visiting hours.
I so much relate to this metaphor that you wonderfully carry throughout the entire poem...
Shows your artistry with the poetic word.
j.

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Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, dear J! That plagiarising feeling is familiar to me; just that feeling of writing som.. read more
enjoyed this one, Jamila, the crooked felons and petty thieves of your words seeming to be the greatest of art, but on reading back revolting you to scowl, think we all some poems like that

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Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, dear gram! Yes, i agree. Most of us have our moments of displeasure about what we wri.. read more
It's a xerox or photocopy of one of my experiences, you scribbled it so well Jamila!
Once when I wrote a poem and was entirely depressed with its outcome, I tried replacing some words but at the end I removed just a coma! Yet the words together in my poem were haunting me. Willy nilly each time when one sits to write or paint decides to create a masterpiece. "Fortune favours the brave" isn't applicable there hence some pieces from all our pieces journey to the trash can, and some get written in golden words/ fitted in golden frames.
Like the harvest of the same farm does contain much healthy and few rotten crop.
Truest write! Thanks for sharing =)

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Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, Tahsin! I guess your experience that time will be very familiar to most of us. Someti.. read more
A fantastic piece of writing Madame. Though not a prolific writer, yet, I can relate to the annoyance and frustration felt here when those obscene, felon words hang around like unwanted guests, intrusive and obstructing the desired thoughts and words. Poetry to read beautifully must have the right amount of poesy and creativity hence whatever hampers that creative process and leads to a sort of poetic stillbirth is naturally a cause of much bitterness and despair. While it's not always possible to come up with a Renoir, we do like to take pride in every poem we craft and love to see it take fine shape and form. At the end of the day, we all write to be appreciated, understood and admired by our readers. I personally feel it's a myth that a writer writes for themselves. Those who say that are mostly lying to themselves and the world. Kudos on yet another great poem!

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Jamila

1 Month Ago

Thanx so much, Monsieur Pestonjee! Your comments here make complete sense. Our words and ideas alway.. read more

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Jamila

Lyon, France



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