Tears

Tears

A Poem by Dark and Mysterious
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Salty water slips down when no bruise outside 'cause the real bruise lies deep inside...

"
Pain inflicted
Beaten down
Tattered and broken
Never made a sound
Abused, cheated
Bruised and tortured
But still strong
Never showed any feeling
Braved it all
But a few harsh words
Scarred her heart
A tear escaped
She felt pain
It was her secret
For only her to know
'Cause the world didn't know
That she had a heart...

© 2014 Dark and Mysterious


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Dark and Mysterious
I originally wrote this as a one liner (description) but then I added the lines... Tell me what you think.

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Short yet poignant.

I believe this poem could describe a vast majority of people. There are many forms of abuse, too many victims to count in this world. Every day sees that list grow larger and larger.

We all have hearts. Sometimes though we are forced to cut them out and put them somewhere free of pain. Unfortunately, if we leave them there too long, it ends with us being the ones to inflict familiar pains on the new batch of victims.

Quite thought provoking.

-Caradoc

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Beautifully crafted.. loved the rhyme and meaning
"Abused, cheated
Bruised and tortured
But still strong"
loved that part..keep it up
ahena

Posted 6 Years Ago


I think it's a really beautiful one and is really deep!!!!! Short , simple n effective..........that's wt i like bou it best!!!!!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


D&M, I dearly love the first four lines. They have the sudden impact of insensible collisions. They set the stage in a way that lets each reader auto-focus in a split second of shared reality, of shared emotion. The next four lines impart character as to the nature and complexity of the tears offered as compensation to the abuser(s).

Reading on we begin to understand the internal fiber is both fragile and resilient; an unusual dichotomy that may not seem logical at first glance but we know by intuition that it can be so. The final lines - a summary of the damage inflicted, a prognosis of sorts, a battle scar in the war of life and a statement of humanity; "..she had (and still has) a heart (otherwise this could not have been written.)

A sacred, scarred breast.. laid bare for all the world to see for those with humble eyes and compassionate understanding.


Posted 7 Years Ago


Dark and Mysterious

7 Years Ago

You give the best reviews :)
i felt like that alot last year

Posted 7 Years Ago


So powerful. Excellent poem. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


I think it is good but very sad!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Most parents tell their kids not to let words and what people say affect them, but it is these words that get drilled in to your head that you remember. My favorite lines:
"But a few harsh words
Scarred her heart
A tear escaped
She felt pain"
Brilliant! Great write!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Dark and Mysterious

7 Years Ago

ty :)
That last line says everything. Just wow, you clearly have a lot of skill.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Dark and Mysterious

7 Years Ago

Thanks :)
Very descriptive!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Short yet poignant.

I believe this poem could describe a vast majority of people. There are many forms of abuse, too many victims to count in this world. Every day sees that list grow larger and larger.

We all have hearts. Sometimes though we are forced to cut them out and put them somewhere free of pain. Unfortunately, if we leave them there too long, it ends with us being the ones to inflict familiar pains on the new batch of victims.

Quite thought provoking.

-Caradoc

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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