Tears

Salty water slips down when no bruise outside 'cause the real bruise lies deep inside...

Pain inflicted

Beaten down

Tattered and broken

Never made a sound

Abused, cheated

Bruised and tortured

But still strong

Never showed any feeling

Braved it all

But a few harsh words

Scarred her heart

A tear escaped

She felt pain

It was her secret

For only her to know

'Cause the world didn't know

That she had a heart...

Author's Note

I originally wrote this as a one liner (description) but then I added the lines... Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Caradoc]

Short yet poignant.

I believe this poem could describe a vast majority of people. There are many forms of abuse, too many victims to count in this world. Every day sees that list grow larger and larger.

We all have hearts. Sometimes though we are forced to cut them out and put them somewhere free of pain. Unfortunately, if we leave them there too long, it ends with us being the ones to inflict familiar pains on the new batch of victims.

Quite thought provoking.

-Caradoc

[Matty Bosox]

This is one of the most fist pounding, hard as a rock, and self determined poems I have ever read...Very gorgeous in such a knockout manner...You take your words and make them grab the reader by the throat and slap them across the face with such a huge use of astoundingly alive words...Absolutely terrific work Dark and Mysterious, your not going to stay very mysterious with excellent work such as this...Kepp it up

[Dark and Mysterious]

Thank you so much :)

[Kelsey]

This is absolutely beautiful. Just, stunning. I love the ending. Great job.

[Dark and Mysterious]

Thanks :)

[Sarah Marie]

I told you that you were wonderful...for starters I really like the format of this :) And secondly, I love how many descriptive words you used, and they all worked perfectly together. Usually I don't really like poetry that doesn't have much punctuation just because I am a traditionalist, but the lack of it in this made everything flow so wonderfully while still revealing the pain and even anger behind this. Great work! 100/100

[Dark and Mysterious]

Thanks

[Kristen]

Very nice! I love the last line.

[Dark and Mysterious]

TY :D

[MusicLover]

amazing write

[Dark and Mysterious]

Ty

[under-the-water]

ok well the thing i don't like about this website is that when you try to give someone a 10000/100 it won't let you - so I'm just stuck with giving you a 100/100. this is such a GREAT poem - and u used such descriptive STRONG verbs and adjectives like tattered and broken, abused cheated, bruised tortured - that really "make" the poem. For me, when i read a poem, the things that stand out to me are the strong verbs and adjectives that paint such a beautiful picture. i don't remember where i heard this - but i think my teacher mr.trivas once yelled at me saying "if you see an adverb - kill it" - I'm not sure why i added that - but i felt like i needed too - BECAUSE YOU DIDNT USE ANY ADVERBS YAYY!
ok I'm done
nice poem bro - keep writing ;)

[Dark and Mysterious]

Thanks n PS m a girl ;)

[under-the-water]

AGHH SORRY my fault - i call every1 bro - my bad babe hahah :)

[ForTheWorld]

painful misery, after reading it, i just feel hurt too.a big ouch!!!

[kayBiE]

I love it, its beautiful