Tears

Salty water slips down when no bruise outside 'cause the real bruise lies deep inside...

Pain inflicted

Beaten down

Tattered and broken

Never made a sound

Abused, cheated

Bruised and tortured

But still strong

Never showed any feeling

Braved it all

But a few harsh words

Scarred her heart

A tear escaped

She felt pain

It was her secret

For only her to know

'Cause the world didn't know

That she had a heart...

Author's Note

I originally wrote this as a one liner (description) but then I added the lines... Tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Caradoc]

Short yet poignant.

I believe this poem could describe a vast majority of people. There are many forms of abuse, too many victims to count in this world. Every day sees that list grow larger and larger.

We all have hearts. Sometimes though we are forced to cut them out and put them somewhere free of pain. Unfortunately, if we leave them there too long, it ends with us being the ones to inflict familiar pains on the new batch of victims.

Quite thought provoking.

-Caradoc

[Just Me]

Very nicely written. I thought it was amazing and very descriptive/emotional.

[Dark and Mysterious]

Thanks :)

[~]

Hmmmm.....this speaks to me on a very deep level. I have found from my own experience and from my experiences dealing with those I have loved, that those who seem to have no feelings at all, are actually the ones with the softest hearts. Walls are built to protect what is too fragile to keep out in the open. This was very well done. It is raw and real and speaks volumes to me. Thank you for sharing, my friend.

[Dark and Mysterious]

thank you for reviewing

[Harley (arbiter)]

i like it alot. can relate a little. this was really good and flowed nicely. i like the idea. great job

[Dark and Mysterious]

TY :D

[...]

Full of truth and pain. Thank you for sharingyour art :)

[Dark and Mysterious]

thanks for reviewing :)

[Rose of Gondor]

Powerful, beautiful words. So easy to relate to and so true. I do have a suggestion though, on the line "tattered and broke", maybe change "broke" to "broken"? I don't know, it just sounds better to me...hehe...:D great poem!

[Dark and Mysterious]

Ty for the suggestion :)

[Sarah]

Good job! You used powerful words and descriptions that leave an impression on the reader's mind. Brilliant :)

[Dark and Mysterious]

Thank you :)

[R.O.M.E.T.S.I.]

This is so amazing. And I can relate to it so much, almost like you knew. Those last two lines are especialy powerfull. Good job.

[Dark and Mysterious]

:D

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

Wow. True, pure, full of pain. Excellent write.

[Dark and Mysterious]

Thanks :)

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Not a problem :)

[Kaylor Mason]

I think this is great! In terms of abusive potential, Words are truly more dangerous than anything physical in this world

[Speak in Silence]

I love it! :D

[Dark and Mysterious]

TY

[Speak in Silence]

You're welcome :)