Battlefield

the war of words and the impact that they have upon our thoughts

 

 

Battlefield

By: Lalli

 

 

Let me fight you with my words in the battlefield of your mind

Let me serenade your heart

With words packed into a hand grenade

As I toss it up into the air

So that at the very instant your eyes glance upon my written word

That you may be given only seconds for interpretation

As they explode

With hope

Hoping that every words meaning will leave you pheening for more like a junkie

A druggie who just got a quick fix

And now is in need of another hit

In a soldiers attempt to escape the pain of war

 

Let the paper

Become your paraphernalia

Let my words

Become your drug

So that upon the digestion of my expression you may see different views

Please remove the limitations of your thoughts

Opening up to another’s point of view with no restrictions

 

Try to understand that poetic verse can be universally understood

With each words interpretation diversely affected

By perspective

 

Imagine as you’re trapped in the trenches of warfare

That it all started with one feeling

One feeling that turned into one thought

One thought that turned into one word that was immediately scripted on to paper

As the transformation of a once quiet thought

Begins to grow louder until a battle cry is heard

As one word

Is given enough strength to turn into celestial power

Strong enough to change the currents of our bloodstream

Let it shift the direction of its flow

So that you may ponder

Let your thoughts slow down from their hastened pace

As you face the emotions provoked by one feeling

One feeling that was felt by one person

That sparked one thought

Which turned into one word that altered the thought pattern of a stranger

In this verbal assault

Let your soul thirst no longer

Quench it with the refreshment of expression

Let the fuel be added to a fire that yearns to burn

As your heart begins to turn softer warming the center of your core

Let the ice drip from your atriums

So the blood of life may pump once more through your veins

Let the clarity of sanity come next from the adrenaline rushing to your brain

 

So that when you finally climb out of the trenches

When the battle line has been drawn to a conclusion

That you may feel like a new person

A better person

A person who was humbled by the experience of what can be learned

As you gained wisdom this day

From taking the time to fight a war

In the battlefield of your mind

 

 

                                     

Reviews

[Amanda]

this is an excellent piece of work, Lalli! sorry i hadn't gotten to it sooner, it got buried in my requests...lol.

but seriously, this is impressive...that words or a word can be powerful in the mind of a person. it can change the whole outlook of that person....it can enlighten or destroy...it all depends on the person that reads and takes those words to heart.

thanks for sharing, my friend.

much love,

Amanda

[Bennett Logan]

Yeah, I don't know what happened to my last review. All I had said was that I enjoyed the poem, but I thought it went in two very different directions. I liked the poetic/literary battlefield metaphor, but then it split off into drug images and language. I was interested in reading more descriptions of the battlefield, that's all... Otherwise, I really enjoyed it. Your syntax is fantastic and I really like your narrative voice. Have a good one, sir, and definately keep up the good work.

[Brette Medb]

I loved how you spun the waging of war into something entirely different in this piece. It was insightful and full of hope for the future of not only the world around us but the peace of our individual souls.

Let your soul thirst no longer
Quench it with the refreshment of expression
Let the fuel be added to a fire that yearns to burn
As your heart begins to turn softer warming the center of your core
Let the ice drip from your atriums
So the blood of life may pump once more through your veins
Let the clarity of sanity come next from the adrenaline rushing to your brain

This stanza called to me the most. Really great piece.

Brette

[He@ther!]

Wow, I loved it!!!:) Brilliant insight!!:) The energy behind your words is vibrant, and extremely inspiring:) Its great to see someone who writes with a passion, with a purpose that echoes in your work:) This is an awesome read, thank you for writing it!!!:)

[Your Tasty Field Adviso..]

words can become such powerful weapons. i hope you use them for good and not manipulation. my stepmother used words on my to manipulate me, let me tell you what (besides the fact that i was confined to my room for 4 years) my mind has never been the same. great poem. you show how powerful words can be to people. great work.

[Angel Bird]

Fabulous piece!

Yes you are so right. A mind very often resembles a battlefield, and fights an internal war about feelings and thoughts.

An outstanding work! Kudos!

[Legion]

"One word will feed the world."

Battlefield of my mine huh? Nuke it! LOL

Good write though. Love the handgrenade of words bit. Kudos.

[ANNA]

I saw my self thinking that by reading your words over n over. I'm fighting a battle within myself. To see what everyone else may see but I can seem to understand that far of head. When you wrote this. It was easy to see the truth behind the gated walls. I've know what you been fighting every day n I can't be more proud of you for facing the facts. Still writing the truth n not fiction S**T!

When you wrote this piece. I alway want to know what spark your inspiration. What was the feel you had at that moment to write Battlefield? Because I'm still blow away by your brilliants! To know that you write what some writers can't write about for years! I'm very greatful to have you as my friend n what impack your inspiration has had on my life. I can't say I havn't been jealous of your work....lol..A Wonderful piece sweets, And don't let others put water on your fire! Through I know no one can take away the gift God gave you!

As away! Your a inspiration to what is coming...CHANGE

Love n respect to you n the art of your words,
A.E.M.

[Ladysue]

Wow, this was a very insightful and brilliant piece. It is so true how one feeling, one thought, utter a word can change a thought pattern of a stranger. This is a very powerful statement!!! My favorite lines...

Please remove the limitations of your thoughts
Opening up to another's point of view with no restrictions

One feeling that was felt by one person
That sparked one thought
Which turned into one word that altered the thought pattern of a stranger

The last stanza was excellent!! An outstanding write!!!!

[Picture of Poetry]

Great write. Wonderful flow and discription too!


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