Gray Eyes~

Gray Eyes~

A Poem by ~Death The Kid~ ☜♥☞
"

Its bout a Boy its not really spose to ryme

"

Your Rare smile makes my day light up,

i find myself traped in your arms,

warm, light falls on your face,

i know ive found my place.

and its with you~

 

 

 

© 2010 ~Death The Kid~ ☜♥☞


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A few grammatical errors ("traped" is "Trapped" and "ive" is "I've") but besides those very minor things, i absolutely loved this! You have such a talent for writing short-but-swet poems, ones that are enough to satisfy a reader, even if they are short. I especially loved how you described this person's smile; "rare". :D LOVED THAT! Thanks for sharing, and keep up the awesome work!

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

Posted 13 Years Ago


Okay very pretty such a cute little story. Okay but like traped is trapped and there are many types of rhyming I mean like a lot if you want to know some just message me. Otherwise this poem is very well put together! I wrote a poem that kinda rhymes if you wanna look at it's called "I miss you" But I mean I'm not a good rhymer, but being a poet doesn't mean you have to rhyme. Nicely done it's a cute lil poem...I think someone's love struck lol n_n

Posted 13 Years Ago


thanks! ^^ i worked on it for on hour thinking of it!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like it, it's sweet ^^

Posted 13 Years Ago


nice short poem! it's very sweet! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


it's short and sweet but I want to read more.
Nice work

Posted 13 Years Ago


tell me wat u think! (my pic has notin to do with the poem but oh well!)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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~Death The Kid~ ☜♥☞
~Death The Kid~ ☜♥☞

SYMMETRY LAND!!!, were symmetry is :3, Japan



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