Night's angel

 

Shadows meet the upturned face

The light it fades away.

The face looks down and moans and sobs

At the memory of yesterday.

 

The leaves, they shiver, like steely knives

The water grows threateningly still.

But the face, it sees nothing, with nose on the ground

And fingers scratching into the hill.

 

The moon comes out, and the face looks up

The tears and the blood trace it’s lines.

The eyes search for something, stained with regret

The voice, it trembles and pines.

 

“Help me” it says, a hoarse croak in the night

“Help me, dear God, if you can.

Because I am nothing, I’m nothing no more

Not even human, not close to a man”.

 

The figure, it rises, and stumbles across

To the body lay strewn on the ground.

The voice, it screams, with raw agony

And drowns out the night’s silent sound.

 

The figure, it rises, and runs into the trees

Away from the blood-stained light.

Away from the world, away from the truth

To become a creature of night.

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

Well, this is something that only people I know personally would know of me..... I don't "shiver" when I read anything cool, dark, and/or strange. This made me shiver!! I think it was your words. 6 stanzas again. lol I LOVE that!! The words you choose to use to describe the smallest of details without drawing it out to be over-dramatic, is awesome. Parts of this poem remind me of the poem I wrote "Slave to the Moon" though this one isn't dark, but there is this life removed from reality where it is soooo possibly to be immersed in this fantasy. I'm all over the place. You might have to read ME before you understand what I'm trying to get out, but it's not coming out!! lol I love this.... you are gorgeous, Lane!! I can't believe how fast I became a fan of yours. : ) Mark is very happy with the fact that he has come across your page, and is very grateful to see you on his friend list!! : ) xoxo -Mark

[Lane-roe]

Yay I'm so glad you liked it! And I'm so flattered that you're a fan of mine :) Don't be in any doubt, it's definitely reciprocated, I love you're writing!! And I'm SO grateful that you did find my page haha :)

[Patrick Henry]

I have stopped by your page the last 4 days to read this specific poem, and STILL I had no idea I commented!! lol I was watching a movie called, "Tristan and Isolde" and I was finding myself returning to your words over and over again, and THEN your profile picture popped into my head where I finally realized where it was coming from. There are days I am glad that I am not dreaming!! AAFILY Thank You for being a part of my friend list where I can rediscover you daily, and have you have my heart in the palm of your hands to do as you wish whilst I am with you in poem...... Beautiful Lane!! xoxo -Mark

[Ahmad Cox]

Beautiful and yet ethereal and otherworldly. I really liked this one.

[Lane-roe]

Thanks so much! :)

[Chris]

A nice lil night theme... stumbles a little but not too bad. Fair flow.

Chris

[Hotwater]

A mini horror tale, you did a good job on the atmosphere, and a good picture created.
*bird*

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Image and crafted flow are never far from your pen, well done, good read.

[Tasha]

The images you created was just amazing. Great write.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Jeremy Baker]

I like the structure and rhythm in this poem, and the images you create. Such a plaintive cry for help reached me in some way. I really like this!