Burden

Burden

A Poem by Laur

It's not something you can take back,
not something to erase,
and watch the shavings fill the page
the page that is this sad place

the vivid memories don't seem to fade
with each passing day
my head hits the pillow
and in my dreams it will always stay

this is not what i want
this is nothing to be happy about
you see me here quiet
all my head does is shout

shout your name as you walk by in memory
hoping you will turn and forget it all
i think the real problem here is 
you don't truly care if i fall

there to remind you
staying to keep you
in its clutches so tight 
no matter how hard you try
its going to haunt you in the night

nothing left to hold onto
its taking you into its hell
escaping is nothing but an idea
secretly you gave up trying to repel

© 2014 Laur


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Well done! I like the part about dreaming and how the memories stay.

Posted 6 Years Ago


amazing poem, it has lots of emotion in it, tells
a story, I liked your poem it really makes me feel
emotional :')

Posted 6 Years Ago


Strong writing, served with one of the most potent emotions there is. Great job, Lauren! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Claustrophobically tangible and melancholic but not without beauty! Lovely x

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much! That was what I was going for.
I liked your poem it really makes me feel emotional :')

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thank you!:)
you trying to make me cry?

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

aww, no! haha
Devesh

6 Years Ago

This is the best review ever! :D
Justin

6 Years Ago

lol thanks
There is a deep dismay and uneasiness in this poem. True, it's heartbreaking, a heavy emotional burden, day after day, night after night...at a loss for what to do...

Is there no way to escape ?

Maybe as Elizabeth Barrett Browning wrote:

" If you must love me, let it be for nought except for love's sake only ".

A wonderful poem again, Lauren

Jesus

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thank you so much!
Tomorrowneverknows

6 Years Ago

You are welcome Lauren ;)
That sounds like heartbreak. Great job describing it

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thank you!
..in its clutches so tight
no matter how hard you try
its going to haunt you in the night..
It can be a true struggle getting past something as difficult as lost love. I'm glad to see that you use writing as a tool to help cope with certain things that have happened to you in the past. Because I can learn from you as well !

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thanks! :)
I can feel an unfulfilled love leading to a beautiful poem. Despite its tone of melancholy it is still melodious.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thanks! :)

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