Heat

Heat

A Poem by Laur

burning fire blazes
copper coals scattered about
ash fills the indigo sky

© 2014 Laur


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I thought Haiku - 'til the 3rd line count was too high...

The visual tones and rhythm worked.

Posted 6 Years Ago


The real love foundations of love has too walked away of hearts into such "blazes" of grey. Excellent work!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Stunning visuals and concise impact, beautiful :) x

Posted 6 Years Ago


Marvelous and spectacular, I felt your words!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thank you!
It triggers the imagination and make you think more about it... the sky, sunlight, and paints vivid images.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thanks! :)
Fires all sorts of imagination and that is the success of any short piece. It is open ended. Like another door opened inside your mind. Thanks for inviting.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thank you very much Avinash :)
"Ash fills the indigo sky."

I love, love, love, LOVE.

There are vivid images in my head, and it's beautiful.

...So beautiful.


Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thank you! That was my favorite part
Luna Zerimar

6 Years Ago

You're welcome.
This feels like the beginning of a great poem.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Laur

6 Years Ago

thanks! :)
MomzillaNC

6 Years Ago

You're welcome.

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