Dreams are Flowing

Dreams are Flowing

A Poem by Laurierose
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Dreams held captive.

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Dreams are flowing from the sky 

So colorful, in fact, 

They have merged into one 

 

 

I HATE giving you everything 

Every raw part and piece 

You’ve taken so many chunks 

That your handfuls appear 

Sloppy 

There are remnants of material 

That have withered away and died 

These holes left in their place 

Are barest when air dried.

© 2018 Laurierose


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The way you have the first stanza set apart is really cool, its like the prologue to a novel where life is etched in colored glass and one chapter after another those panes of glass start to break. If only we were gifted with hindsight. Really cool write and very identifiable plight. Great job!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Laurierose

1 Year Ago

I'm glad you noticed the separation of stanzas. I wanted to mimic the dreams in the sky and how they.. read more



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The first stanza is the sky and the second stanaza is the cloud
My imagination to your poem!!

I liked how two contradict stanza are making a deal for a good poem!!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Or as I like to call it, the first stanza is the balloon
floating free and the second is the.. read more
and there is depth in terms of content and expression

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Thank you, sette. I appreciate the sincerity.
One is a solid number bold!!!! Wow people can take and take and takeeeeeeeee. It gets draining after some tome leaves one with a void inside. I like the write:)

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Laurierose

1 Year Ago

After awhile of taking so much, there's bound to be nothing left. We're stuck with our thoughts, the.. read more
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1 Year Ago

Yeah I know all to well your very welcome:)
When the dream turns into a nightmare - only escape is looking for poetic justice - poignantly expressive write - well written … :-)

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Ohh, yes! Simply said and agreed. It's often the best remedy for heavy minds. Thank you for the sinc.. read more
An interesting styled piece.

It seems to me from experience that too many people are living their lives with hopes and dreams, yet either doing nothing to pursue them or being restricted by their situation from pursuing them. At some point one must bite the bullet and make those dreams become a reality else forever be a dreamer, and forever hold their peace.

A nice write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Laurierose

1 Year Ago

We should take hold of the reigns of our dreams so that they could potentially become reality; I agr.. read more
Your first stanza brings to mind the idea of “freedom” – dreams merged together emanating from the sky! And I love the way you juxtapose the rest of the poem, which is the opposite of freedom. Your description of the dream robber reminds me of many such narcissists who dominated my early life & snuffed my early dreams. Nicely original way to show something very recognizable (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Laurierose

1 Year Ago

This method broadcasted many emotions too complex to be verbally expressed. Very cathartic write for.. read more
The old folks used to say, "Keep yourself to yourself". And that's not bad advice when protecting and nurturing your dreams. After all, we have to get those baby birds ready to fly and keep the cat from the nest. I enjoyed the read.

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Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Preparation is key. It doesn't hurt to be secure if/when faced with opposition. Thank you for the si.. read more
Unique and original form. Strong words, honest, crushing and poignant. Graphic and horrific imagery of literal and/or figurative predatory wounds left on one who has been abused. Abused by life, cruelty, love,-any would fit here. In strength, presented with effective use of capitalization- “I HATE”, she fights back. Great language, metaphor, message. Excellent write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

1 Year Ago

I love how you interpreted this and shed some perspective. This was a very cathartic write for me. T.. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

1 Year Ago

You are very welcome. Loved the poem.:))
Powerful, raw and beautiful expressed and felt.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Laurierose

1 Year Ago

I appreciate the sincere review, my friend!
The beginning drew me in...

Seems as two voices - perhaps a counterpoint's view. I am still thinking on what I perceive here.

Posted 1 Year Ago


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Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Have you ever been so happy, as if in a dream-like state? All of your dreams are before you and you'.. read more
Chris

1 Year Ago

...and - yes - yes. Yes again. 'Til driving 3 A.M., a Sunday morning ...missed the tree and the car.. read more
Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Aha! Thank you for that bit of perspective, my friend. Much appreciated.

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Laurierose

Durham, NC



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