Unforgettable

Unforgettable

A Poem by Laurierose
"

Sincerely.

"

Dear Darling,

 

Do you remember?

Our story

The one where we saved each other

From falling too hard

In love, like, guilt

But in the end

It happened

Do you remember?

Our song

The one with lyrics that stretched

Our truth

So many miles long

Do you remember?

Our palms

The way they held on to so many

Slippery slopes

And weathered much more than

They could grasp

Do you remember?

Our flame

The one that burned so bright

It outshone the sun

And overwhelmed starlight

Do you remember?

Our time

It stood so still

So still we could hardly look back,

Overlook, or rewind

-With Love,

Me

© 2018 Laurierose


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and the feeling i get here is that both parties thought themselves right out of the relationship...the fantasy looked and sounded great...but then the reality was too scary.
nothing to really rewind.
i like the pace, and i like the somewhat surprise ending.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

1 Year Ago

That's how it's happens sometimes, unfortunately. I appreciate the sincere review!



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I am left with a sense of wonder if the anticipated sketch of each other measured up to wanting and the interrelation in the unfolding coming true was a whirlwind disappointment but at the end the question mark of the crossed out me also gives me inference that it wasn't of a lover but of the love of self in this depiction or perhaps a bit of both.... but nicely penned reflections Laurie regardless of intent it makes me think

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

2 Weeks Ago

There’s definitely a hint of hesitation weaved in this piece and a mass amount of ambiguity, I’l.. read more
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

2 Weeks Ago

oh i see that now too
deeply loving words but filled with regret. there is nothing like the feeling of being in love. when we're deeply in love, we feel as if nothing could ever stop it. yes, they say that love is blind and things happen or eyes are opened. life happens. sometimes we're in love with the idea of being in love more than the other person themselves. no matter what we do, it happened and is not going away and we can't go back and change the past. it hurts and is temporary but we can take comfort in good memories - that is the beauty of loving... :)

"There is no remedy for love but to love more." - Thoreau



Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

3 Months Ago

Powerful words. Loved the honesty in your review and quote towards the end. Thank you for reading.
Wonderful use of words dear Laurierose.
"Do you remember?
Our time
It stood so still
So still we could hardly look back,
Overlook, or rewind"
I loved the above lines. We do remember and the rewinding of time. Sweet dreams. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

3 Months Ago

Always a pleasure to partake in your perceptions. Thank you, my friend.
Very much enjoyed reading this poem. It brought back memories of someone I once knew very well.


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

3 Months Ago

I’m glad this personally resonated with you. Thank you for your review.
Lea Sheryn

3 Months Ago

You're welcome.
we all weave stories.... all stories are not fairy tale...
few break us apart...and few remain in memory as once upon a time...
then few manage to be a part of the horror stories :)
and few just remain without any closure... i feel these are the worst kinds..
i enjoyed reading you poem... very nicely done..

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Yes, I agree with this. It's those stories riddled with the strongest emotion that are unforgettable.. read more
Love is blind, until it falls apart, then it suffers, and breaks eventually!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Love may be very malleable, I agree. Thank you!
This love story is unforgettable . The sum of answers to all the questions, makes an epic and perfect love story from beginning to end. Lovely writing,.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Oh my, I'm flattered! Epic love story? I've never thought of it that way; thank you. I appreciate th.. read more
Mrudula Rani

1 Year Ago

You are most welcome.
Looking back is for those who have finished the journey and made the trip. It's not for the journeyman or the pilgrim. Tomorrow is a map planned by those who travel...wondering what new adventures and exciting experiences lay ahead...here's to living every day making every tomorrow as filled with good memories as yesterday and never stopping until the trip is done. Like the fellow said, "There's no future living in the past." As for things finished...some things are in the past for a reason. I enjoyed the read.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

1 Year Ago

I loved the quote here. It's true; there's nothing living in the past for us. All we have is experie.. read more
I love the part about keeping each other from falling too hard. The point that is expressed it is always too late anyway...lol. Heres to walking those paths and building our character through the ones we love. Excellent write!!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

1 Year Ago

Yes, the irony of this line was almost comical (lol!). It's almost as if the sooner we try to grab a.. read more
This is an awesome playful inquiry that brings a smile to my face. What stands out is how spontaneous your writing sounds, even tho it's also well-crafted with an organized flow of ideas. I love the way the intensity of the narrator's questioning seems to be more & more dramatic, with ever-more-vivid imagery to symbolize how this connection feels. I love the way it starts out a little timid & reticent, before ramping up to this ending crescendo of enthusiasm! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Laurierose

1 Year Ago

I love how you caught that! Yes, the choppiness was definitely for effect. I surely appreciate the w.. read more

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