A Need

A Need

A Poem by LawrenceRaybon
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Some people confuse wants and needs. This poem is most definitely about a need.

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Oh I have a need,
burning inside.
A call I must heed;
a shame I can't hide.

And starting to dance
with urgent gyration,
I grab at my pants
with increasing frustration.

You point to a door,
seeing my need,
but the pool on the floor
means I already peed.

© 2017 LawrenceRaybon


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LawrenceRaybon
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hahahaha. Good one. I don't know why this only got 1 review.

Posted 6 Months Ago


LawrenceRaybon

6 Months Ago

Thank you!
When I got to the last stanza I literally laughed out loud. Your poetry from what I have read thus far is beautiful and sweet. I'm especially loving the theme of your daughter. It's very sweet to see a father so doting and affectionate.

This poem is very tongue in cheek and you hit the mark between fun and art.

Posted 4 Years Ago


LawrenceRaybon

4 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words! My writing pretty much runs the whole gambit of emotions, you just h.. read more

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LawrenceRaybon
LawrenceRaybon

Jackson, MS



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