A Poem by LeeLee Ryder

ASK MYSELF WHY REVISITED... an eye's tongue lashing ... dedicated to Lynne



I look in my eye and say hey big blue

They're really brown, I guess I fooled you

I asked, do you see that "free will" is for keeps?

Of course I swear on my big brownie peeps

So what's the story, will I ever go blind

To the wicked tyrannies of a troubled mind 

Of course not doll, you're smarter than that

The rabbit'll pop out & eat the master's fat hat

So let me get this straight, I'm free to be me

Yes indeedy my sweet, be the best eye you can be

No worries, no strife, you big hearted soul

The jackasses & duffs can't charge you a toll

I breathe in the air, my eye gleams with joy

To never be manipulated like a goddamn toy

Ah at last, my eyes open wider than wide

Lightin' up the big sky, never going with the tide 

©2009LLR  113009 1117P


© 2009 LeeLee Ryder

Author's Note

LeeLee Ryder
to get the full impact of this, check out my other poem (Ask myself why")

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You have a remarkable style. Always a pleasure to read you!

Posted 11 Years Ago

i like this a lot...great work... i'll have to check out, ask myself why

Posted 11 Years Ago


So damn witty, cute and every other good adjective I can think of.
And you dedicated this to Moi? I am humbled and smiling a coat hanger in the mouth grin right now.
Now I'll need to think of one for you. Yes, I'm going to work on that.
this is awesome!!

Thanks, Dixie Lee Lee

Posted 11 Years Ago

very nice. kind of tongue in cheek at parts - funny with an underlying sadness. lynne with love it.

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the wordplay, and also the bits of fun tucked neatly inside. But I see the serious side as well, so all said, it packs a punch of power that makes it both a delight and fun. Well written ....

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very comical and emotional, love it. some rhymes were brilliant and the general theme, classic and original, you beutifully got your point across

Posted 11 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on November 30, 2009
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I"m a creative soul involved in community art... (I usually respond to reviews by reviewing the reviewer, so don't feel slighted if I don't say thanks- It's implied -THANKS) future scribes: f.. more..


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