Dark Secrets

Lights Out... You can't find what you can't see. I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized

DARK SECRETS

 

These eyes Tainted and Scarred,

The Heart restless behind bars,

A Soul lost between then and now

 

I’ve become a clouded face, unrecognized,

A Shadow within materializes

Unaware, there’s no time to prepare,

Unleashing its fury for all to bear

 

Strength it feeds from those who care,

Twisting and turning words and stares

Form is now what I once was,

It’s Poison if any… One of Love

 

Shadow now I, fight I try...

For those I hurt, my words are lies

Understand I cry, I feel your pain,

Ball and Chain, I am restrained

 

Pleasure filled, Darkness slips away,

Face left to those I've betrayed

Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,

Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand

 

SHADOW lingers and laughs within,

Your LOVE inside, he cannot win

 

Legacy

Author's Note

What is your Dark Secret - visit and enter yours today http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/-Volume-1%2C-Book-2--Dark-Secrets/13548/

P.S. Re-read and between the lines

Legacy

Reviews

[Luis Gabriel]

I love the minimalism! I love the shortness of the statements to really pack the punch of the emotion displayed! The only constructive work I would do is maybe some constructive imagery to tie the emotions to something I can see or feel, it feels alot like there are so many things felt blending all together I don't know where to start!

Great job, keep it up!

[no tell writer]

Shadow now I, fight I try...
For those I hurt, my words are lies
Understand I cry, I feel your pain,
Ball and Chain, I am restrained

I can really feel this write, I can relate to this a lot, i love this stanza

[Dagger Jones]

very good my friend ! You got rythum in ur rhyme !

[Lisette]

I love it, I totally understand!

[~Jennifer Holly Cole~&c..]

Well done. Love wins...always. :D

[Shadow]

I enjoyed this on so many levels, I've been away for years and have finally returned but this is a surprise I'm glad I made it back to read.Just need more towards the visual.

[Paul Ramnora]

There's something about this poem which, really and truly, rings a bell from deep down within. ;-)

[mom50801]

I love this! It speaks on so many levels of emotions.

[HamonoAkira]

"Strength to hold on, You reach for my hand,
Smiling and Scarred, Your eyes Understand"
--I feel like these made me breathe. The first stanzas were constricting me, holding me back and gripping me like I cannot breathe. Then I go to these lines and I felt alive. I felt hope and light. This is a wonderful poem. It invites me to look into the positive facet of everything.

[Wesley D. Stein]

This is good. Reminds me of a single mother struggling with how to raise a child alone. Comma usage may need a tweak. Overall, well written poem with good subversive imagry.

[karenlee]

Pulled me in with this. gripping. :)