Mates are mates

This is an a poem that has an Aussie feel. The show stopped , but the fun only just started.

Mates are mates
(Until)

 

‘E sits himself down,
to watch a show.
Popcorn and mars bars,
‘e’s an Aussie you know.
The fella beside,
is smooching his gal.
The bloke behind says,
“Are yah comfortable pal”?

The show begins,
but we can’t hear a thing.
There’s a fella in front,
who’s decided to sing.
“Yah silly ole fool,
Can yah wait until later.
I missed the best part,
when the gator, ater”.

The power went out,
just after that.
We waited like fools,
for an hour, in fact.
Some tool said,
“What a wonderful show”.
The buggers been sleepin’,
in the second row.

Then the fun started,
they turned on the lights.
The show went for minutes,
not till midnight.
We asked for our money,
but they said we was dreamin’.
I’ll tell yah right now,
‘is eyelids were steamin’.

‘E called for the cops,
but they said they were busy.
The s**t hit the fan,
I began to feel dizzy.
They eventually came,
but not over money.
‘E said something stupid,
like, “I’ll stick yah head in the dunny”.

Me mates a mate,
in a land from Down Under.
When the bugger gets jail,
I begin to wonder.
Bail him out?
S**t, not in your life.
I gunna spend the evening,
with ‘is darling wife.

That's what mates are for.

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think of my latest Poem. I would love to hear your opinions.
Thank you.

Reviews

[sivan]

you have a comical style.... it's refreshing

[Leonard Birch]

Thank you my friend. I am glad it gave you a chuckle.
Cheers
Leo

[Prritiy]

i was like what is this and smiling all the time. nice one.

[Leonard Birch]

Thak you so much Prritiy. I really appreciate you feedback.
Hope you have a wonderful day.
read moreThak you so much Prritiy. I really appreciate you feedback.
Hope you have a wonderful day.
Take care
Leo

[Prritiy]

You are welcome, thanks and reciprocate the same.
sure will read.

[Sharon Kim]

I enjoyed this! Different audience than most of your writing on here so far...but it had great rhythm, an excellent accent and a bit of fun! :)

[Leonard Birch]

Thanking you Sharon. Yes, it is a far cry from being suitable for children, but I would like to write for a various audience.
All the best for Sunday Sharon
Take care

[Sharon Kim]

I agree! After all, people are complex-we should never limit ourselves! Hope you have a great day, too! :)

[Leonard Birch]

Thank you Sharon. I am beginning to get a handle on this site now. Not really computer savvy, but managing alot better. Will get to your works again soon.
Cheers

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you bad boy...but hell the lights are out...

so ...guess all is fair in love and war...

wonder what the movie was--"Lake Placid"?

:)

your writing is great fun Leaonard.

[Leonard Birch]

Thank you Jacob. Your comments are greatly appreciated.
I am glad you had a laugh.
All the best for Sunday.
Leo

[S. Overstreet]

That was comical. I was giggling the whole time. Loved it.

[Leonard Birch]

Thank you my friend for your wonderful feedback.
I am glad you had a laugh.
Cheers.
read moreThank you my friend for your wonderful feedback.
I am glad you had a laugh.
Cheers.
Leo

[Rita L. Sev]

Ha! Very entertaining - though not for kids, this one! A fun read - I read it aloud and kept laughing as I did so. :)

[Leonard Birch]

Yes, it is definetly not for children. But I am glad it gave you a laugh.
Cheers!
Leo

[Angi]

Ha! This had me laughing, Leo. I like the accent you wrote with. Nicely done! Angi~

[Leonard Birch]

Thanking you Angi. I glad it gave you a laugh.
Cheers
Leo

[Sami Khalil]

A whimsical write but with a realistic side to it in our mundane lives...I keeps us suspenseful till the end...Bravo

[Leonard Birch]

Thank you my friend.
I really appreciate your feedback.
Leo

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure , sir...:)