Tears in the rain

Tears in the rain

A Poem by Secret Lullaby

Crying in the rain,

Hides ny pain.

Nobody can tell,

How hard I just fell.

He left with no goodbye.

So in the rain I now cry.

I let the rain wash away my tears,

Just as much as my fears.

I will always remeber the day,

I watched you drive away.

 

 

© 2013 Secret Lullaby


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It's sad and emotional. Since I can say that with confidence, that shows this is good writing. The only downside when I read it, which wasnt too slow or emotional, was that is didn't flow too well for me. It seems more of a paragraph written down the page. You did a great job with expression though and showed feelings through writing. Keep it up.

Posted 11 Years Ago


just a minor typo on line 2 with ny where it should be my

other than that, this is a great poem that shows the despairing feelings felt by a broken heart.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is so sad... But its well written. Love It.

~Alex

Posted 11 Years Ago


so sad but powerful..nicely written :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Oh I can definitely tell this is from your heart! Great write!






Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Secret Lullaby

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