Annabel

Please read my story, "The Blue Elk" first

Cell 159

Inhabitant: Annabel Sandrake

 

“You enjoyed sticking it in me didn’t you? DIDN’T YOU?! You sure fooled me; I deserved it I suppose for not seeing how you looked at her…” Her gaze tightens as if she is staring a hole through someone, though no one is there. Suddenly she breaks into laughter. She is hysterical, the mania burns in her eyes.

The light flickers, her expression changes. She is now calm. Her eyes are like that of a child; innocent, pure, and full of hope.

“It started in elementary school didn’t it? You were so nice back then.  Every day you and I would play on the swings together, pick flowers by the fence of the playground, and….when I fell you would bring me a bandage. I looked forward to seeing you every day. My fondest memory of you was when you bought me my first valentine. I cried tears of joy; my youth was just beginning then. We stayed friends for years, getting closer each day until we decided to be together.”

She looks up “I was so happy. Every day I tried to make an adventure. Things were perfect. I remember the feel of your soft hands, the feeling of your hair when I ran my fingers through it, your touch…..I was so happy for those years we were together. And then…”

She looks up and screams with a gargantuan shriek

“WHAT DO YOU DO...on the night we made love for the first time you tell me…” She starts to heave in breaths heavily “…YOUTELL ME THAT YOU ARE LEAVING ME FOR THAT PLASTIC PUBESENT POLE DANCER FROM OUR GYM CLASS! You made me sit there day after day watching her sit on your lap, sucking on your ear just to tempt a response from me!” She is now crying, tears well down her face, though they are tears from anger. She then wipes them away.

“I remember every detail. I promised myself when we got together that I would remember everything. Thanks to you I have a photographic memory.  I remember every day coming back to my house and going nuts over you and her. I destroyed my room many times thanks to you. I had to keep my fist clenched during class also, although once I broke my hand on the wall out of sure frustration and anger. Then THAT day came.” She has a look of pure rage on her face, clenching her fists she decides to squeeze the bars of her cot so as to not hit something.

“Then one day you decided to push me over the edge. I am not sure if it was ego or just a way to make me suffer but you went too far! I was walking my usual route to school and what do I see? I see you and her having sex up against a tree! Then when you saw me you gave me a grin and said ‘Woops, sorry I didn’t think you came this way. I was really just waiting to see what you would say’ and you laughed!”  She lets out a murderous scream.

 “I scream bloody murder. Then I ran. I ran and ran until I got to school I knew there was no point in standing for this. Well you wanted a response from me didn’t you? DIDN’T YOU?! I saw how you always looked at that….thing of hers when she bent over and I knew that is when you were most distracted, and since she was your accomplice in my suffering I had to get rid of her too. Gym was the right time. I snuck into the gym and looked for a way to end you and then I found it. There were punching bags hanging from the ceiling that were tied to rope behind the stage in the gym. Then I saw on the stage that there were mats…so I just made a little snip” she snickers mischievously “oh the thud was stupendous, and her scream was music to my ears. Then another snip and….” She grins, “My revenge was complete.”

A wicked smile came across her face, and then said sarcastically, “My favorite part was when the prosecutor asked me ‘Did you cut he lines to the punching bag above the male deceased and then perceded to cut the straps holding the schools wrestling mats tugther, thus causing the deaths of both deceased?’ and I said ‘wow your grammar sucks, duh I cut them you twat waffle!’ her reaction was priceless! I guess the judge felt I belong in this damp place. Especially after my lawyer tried the make a move on me….and I bit her tongue out when she tried to kiss ME!” She is laughing so hard she is crying.

Then a voice came from behind her “Annabel, SHUT UP! You are disturbing the other inmates…” said the prison nurse.

“Oh you, the women with the fat butt, are going to tell me to shut up? HA, yeah right! You can take those pills and shove them….”

“ORDERLY!” screamed the nurse and two orderlies appeared, “Tie her down so we can feed her, her daily dose.” The two big men entered the cell and strapped her down, her screaming vulgarity the whole time. Eventually, they strapped her down and they injected a liquid version of her medicine. She was then calm. She remained calm for two days; the nurse pumped her full of three times the dosage necessary…

“Hey nurse!” yelled an inmate. The nurse went over to the next cell. “Cell 160....why are you bent over?” The nurse was appalled.

“Unlike that stupid woman I am more than willing to take my medicine” says the man laughing at the disgust of the nurse.

“Ugh.” She scowled and put the medicine, in a cup, on the platform in the center of his door.

“AWWWWW you’re no fun, same time tomorrow? Oh wait, I am going to die in three days! Well I guess I shall see you in the lustful level of hell” He said with a smile. “Looks like things are getting interesting tonight….”  He sneered as the nurse wheeled her cart away.

Author's Note

This is an edited version of the original chapter

Reviews

[H-Jonesy]

God that was wonderfull! ive have honestly been looking for a good book to keep up with and ive found it!.
my only suggestion would be to add some more detail, it will make your piece longer and more interesting. but great great job. please keep it up

[SK Woodiwiss]

It felt that every word was slammed down. Good affect and terrorizing. I caught myself thinking what would it be like in that madness and had to stop - it was making me depressed and scared. So, you have definitely evoked a response from me. Please continue.

[Mitch*Dandy]

Wow... Crazy place huh? Ha! That was very interesting. Caught my attention once I started reading. Nice beginning.

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

I love this!
The madness, the vengeance!
I can't wait to read more!

-Elissa :D

[Luna Northstar]

Wow that was, amazing!!!

[Dark Angel]

lol lots better.

[Sandra Dawn]

Wow! Really intense and interesting! I like everything about it, particularly the flow of one thing to the next. In my opinion, once you start reading this it's impossible to stop! Excellent work, keep writing!

[The High Poet]

Great job! Enjoyed reading your first chapter, I will read the second tomorrow

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this story. So much action and events and the story was outstanding. I like the girl. Her story bold and strong. She speak honest and true words. Story is strong and with purpose. I like it. I will read on.
Coyote

[James Watts]

This is a better draft and you did a nice of keeping everything in the same tense.

[Frantzuu]

Great start so far dude, keep 'em coming :D