A Poem by Levioshock

Just a poem I got from a little inspiration


Find me a word

Heed my call

Songs from a bird

Waiting on the wall


Can you hear me?

Can you not?

Please my angel

Don’t fear the dark


Nay the bee

Calm the trees

The Willow’s whisper

Your sweet kiss


Come to me

My dark eyed maiden

Play me you

Sweetened cadence


Take my hand

And follow me

While we rest

In the sea

© 2010 Levioshock

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pretty and very well written. i envy you, if i could write like this...

i enjoyed this very much and the vocabulary was well used

Posted 10 Years Ago

I thought it was very good! If I could put words down like this I would love it! Your a very good at putting words down on paper! I enjoyed this poem!

Posted 10 Years Ago

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I loved the flow of this and how the rhyme scheme was broken up. Its a very sweet poem and i love all the descriptiveness and imagery. It was a lovely read.


Posted 11 Years Ago

I'm with Aldora on this; I'd rather it rhymed all the way or not at all, preferably the first because your opening stanza is your best. It never gets bad by any stretch, but the indecision does make it a little difficult as the reader has to adjust from one rhythm to another.

Posted 11 Years Ago

Honestly... the love you write about touched me in the longing ....If silence is what we hear then it is a good way .. patience is a virtue.. and Love is here.. never goes away... aw
I learn in my child years.. that the Ocean carries healing and life.. voices and whispers from God.. and stories that never end.. that is what I see in your work. a Journey awaiting to evolved.. love it again

Posted 11 Years Ago

Oh my my my...

Posted 11 Years Ago

I liked the concept behind it, but I found it a little hard to read because it seemed to rhyme, but then suddenly dropped off. Was that intentional? If it wasn't, I think you should choose to rhyme or not (I personally liked the first stanza so I think it should all be rhyme). Otherwise, short and sweet. Good work!

Posted 11 Years Ago

I liked it but the first stanza was my favorite, keep writing! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago

i liked the last verse. Its got like a med evil kinda shakespeare feel to it, i may be wrong but thats how it felt to me.

Posted 11 Years Ago

The first stanza is definitely my favorite. It flows beautifully and the rhyming works really well. You lose the rhyming scheme after that and I wonder if you did that on purpose. Maybe creating your own style. Which I like it makes it unique. Overall I enjoyed it.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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Added on April 12, 2010
Last Updated on April 13, 2010
Tags: willow whispers ocean love tree



Copley, OH

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