I wish I could help...

I wish I could help...

A Poem by Levioshock

I want to kick his a*s

No you can’t

Put his face through glass

I’ll just laugh

 

I wish I could help you

I know

For what he’s put you through

It shows

 

If I were there he would be gone

You wouldn’t suffer anymore

I’d take your somewhere safe and warm

Where he couldn’t come to your door

 

I know you want to help

Your feelings are heartfelt

Right now let me handle this

I want to fix my crisis

 

Maybe someday we will find each other

And have a good time

We have a lot to do together

Things will be divine

© 2010 Levioshock


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HAHAHA

The world does not want us, (but well need us, just that dont accept the fact that they need us)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow. Nice. It a beautiful piece. About how a friends reaches out to help her/his friend through a crisis situation with the mere wanting of her to be happy.
Great write. Keep it up. :)
Loved the way you've used the colours.

Posted 13 Years Ago


from the way i am interpreting it, i have felt this way before... i like the way you incorporated 2 different voices

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very nice. I like how you made it like a conversation with the different colors. That was pretty good. I liked it so much, I want to read more. I feel its missing something so maybe you can add a little more, if you can. Good job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like the style

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i thought it was pretty good, the rhyme sceme seems to come and go a little........ which i think itd maybe be better if you decided to rhyme all the time or not rhyme at all.......... but in the end it was good nice job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

perfect!!!!! i lovvveeddd it bunches. It was beautiful and heartfelt with lots of purpose!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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This was great :D well done!

-Beth

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I find it interesting how you incorporated two characters in one poem. well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Levioshock
Levioshock

Copley, OH



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