I wish I could help...

I wish I could help...

A Poem by Levioshock

I want to kick his a*s

No you can’t

Put his face through glass

I’ll just laugh

 

I wish I could help you

I know

For what he’s put you through

It shows

 

If I were there he would be gone

You wouldn’t suffer anymore

I’d take your somewhere safe and warm

Where he couldn’t come to your door

 

I know you want to help

Your feelings are heartfelt

Right now let me handle this

I want to fix my crisis

 

Maybe someday we will find each other

And have a good time

We have a lot to do together

Things will be divine

© 2010 Levioshock


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I like this poem a lot. Sometime it feel like we should knock the hell out of someone. But then we are dumb as the person who deserved the pain. Better to hold up your friend and give them reason to be content with someone who care about them. A powerful poem. To the point and strong.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


Love it. :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nice two voice poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like the back and forth conversational tone of this piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is fantastic!
I love the dialogue going on within the poem.
"Maybe someday we will find each other
And have a good time
We have a lot to do together
Things will be divine"
You ended the write perfectly. I love this!
Keep up the amazing work!

-Elissa :)


Posted 13 Years Ago


I loved this! Very very very good job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


"i want to fix my crisis." i love it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like the conversation and how you expressed the feelings.
Very nice.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is really good! I liked the way you used two perspectives and used the different colors for each one. Very well written.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Levioshock
Levioshock

Copley, OH



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