Life (Can't hold you back)

Life (Can't hold you back)

A Poem by Levioshock
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I thought of this awesome line that I turned into a poem

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When you're in the fight
Fight with all your might
Battle for control
This is just your soul

Swing and sway and serenade 
Force your will right through
Ignore the attack
Life can't hold you back

© 2010 Levioshock


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This is so brief yet, good things come in small packages. I had to read it more than once to absorb the effect.

'Life can't hold you back' I feel stronger and capable arready. Thank you for sharing this little gem.

-youoweyoupay

Posted 6 Years Ago


I like the last stanza.To me it's saying sometimes you have to be sneaky and wheedle to get what you want. But then other times you need to be loud and get in peoples faces and tell them what you need to say. Ignore what everyones telling you and go for it. Just because you're human doesn't mean you can't do outstanding things.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is a great poem about fighting for what we want out of life.


Posted 8 Years Ago


A great message about life. I like it

Posted 8 Years Ago


A lovely message is conveyed here. Life, can't live with it, can't live without it ;) On a more serious note though, it flowed nicely for such a short piece, and was strongly portrayed. Good write :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


I love the sentiment in this poem. the only one who can truly hold us down is ourselves. If you deeply want something then we must fight. Great inspiring write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I love this. Short, but very strong. Especially in the last stanza. Great work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


These were my fav lines...
Swing and sway and serenade
Force your will right through
-they seemed to come right from the depths of your soul.

Ignore the attack - not sure I agree with that
Life can't hold you back - I don't agree, mainly because I think i have a different definition of life.

"When you're in the fight
Fight with all your might - does that need to be stated?
Battle for control
This is just your soul' - not sure I follow "JUST your SOUL" ??

Was that sarcastic?

Posted 8 Years Ago


Nice poem. Thanks for sharing your words with me.
Life and Light!
TT-TTO-NI-K
Elk

Posted 8 Years Ago


It's a very true poem, and I loved what you were saying in it. My advice, and you don't have to follow it, but if you set a rhyme scheme (aabb) in the first stanza, you should keep it in all the following stanzas. Great poem and happy holidays.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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Levioshock
Levioshock

Copley, OH



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