White Hole

White Hole

A Poem by Levioshock

Just a concept I came up with


Steam punk dreams in a starship frame

Silent, like an intergalactic rain

Life is an octavarium ride

Floating through the great divide


Time is the nemesis

To the fractal’s stride

Behold the hypnotist

And his all seeing Eye


The witch comes forth around the bend

Holding her spider near its threads end

Don’t look too closely into the white hole

Or else you may not discover what is within your soul

© 2011 Levioshock

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short poem but very eloquently put. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago

HaHo (Hello),
Kool poem! Reminds me of a tool song I listened to last night while making supper, kind of has a tune to the words. Life and Light

Posted 9 Years Ago

the first two verses are very strong, but the last one falls apart a bit at the end.
maybe revisit it sometime, especially with lines like 'to the fractal stride'

Posted 9 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very good story in this short poem. I like the beginning. Words were positive and create a very good world. I like where you went with the tale. Last lines are my favorite.
"Don’t look too closely into the white hole
Or else you may not discover what is within your soul"
Thank you for the outstanding poem.

Posted 9 Years Ago

This has many strong thoughts and lines in this poem. The last stanza really captures one's attention. This was done well and held my attention.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on May 20, 2011
Last Updated on May 20, 2011



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