The mess of feelings

The mess of feelings

A Poem by HipsterPrincess17

Feelings, why do we have to have the cursed things.

They kill us, break us down.

We go mad and lose control.

We cry over stupid little things.

Feelings hurt,

they sting.

 

 

Feelings are blessings, beautiful wonderful things! 

They make us alive and help us thrive!

We feel love and can enjoy the beauty

Of the heavens above!

Feelings are sweet 

and come in warm greets

© 2015 HipsterPrincess17


Author's Note

HipsterPrincess17
So I made this poem in like 15 minutes, which is really fast and probably not very smart.....

And I wrote this at midnight so please excuse my mistakes XD

Thank you for reading!

PLEASE leave a review to help me out!

Once again, Thank you all

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The fact that the first stanza is bigger than the second stanza says a lot. The first one is the overwhelming feeling as it is the one that is easier to think than the second one as turmoil is a commonality in any one person's life. The contrast between them is great, but the similarity between them is greater. Great job. I think poetry is something you could get into.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Awwwww!! Thank you so much, that means a lot to me. I'm actually working on another poem right now! .. read more
Richard Mueller

4 Years Ago

:) Okay! Sounds good. Can't wait to read it. P.S. I messaged you! Do get a chance to reply, darling... read more



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Good contrast, these two stanzas....:)

I suggest to shorten the first line by remove one "have" and move the words around a bit to add another revealing adjective....like

Feelings, why are we cursed with such tormenting things........

You capture so well the state of chaos of the human mind.....roller-coastering up to elation, and then crashing down to utter depression.....and this can happen a few times in the same day!

How about including an analogy or two? It may add some life to your ideas...:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

SleeplessVolcano

4 Years Ago

Don't underestimate the time it takes to write a poem.....those "left-brainers out there takes ages .. read more
SleeplessVolcano

4 Years Ago

lol...I mean, don't OVER-estimate...
HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Lol! Don't worry I got what you meant XD
The fact that the first stanza is bigger than the second stanza says a lot. The first one is the overwhelming feeling as it is the one that is easier to think than the second one as turmoil is a commonality in any one person's life. The contrast between them is great, but the similarity between them is greater. Great job. I think poetry is something you could get into.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Awwwww!! Thank you so much, that means a lot to me. I'm actually working on another poem right now! .. read more
Richard Mueller

4 Years Ago

:) Okay! Sounds good. Can't wait to read it. P.S. I messaged you! Do get a chance to reply, darling... read more
Very beautiful, totally love it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Thank you!
alice

4 Years Ago

You're welcome!
oh my good god! this is one of the most beautiful poems i've ever read! i loved the way you described both the sides! kudos! :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Oh my gosh!! I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you so so very much!
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SKY
Feelings are sweet
and come in warm greets...Beautiful lines, I enjoyed the read. You made a very good point for readers about "Feelings" Good one :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Aww :) Thank you!
SKY

4 Years Ago

Most Welcome :)
Is the glass half full or half empty some might say. You've shown both sides and its up to the reader to decide which they agree with. This is like holding up a mirror and saying, okay, which one are are you?

Nice job.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Thank you so so so much!!!
 Relic

4 Years Ago

You're welcome so much. :)
I enjoyed this piece of yours. I especially liked the last two lines of the first stanza.
To make this even better, add a question mark at the end of the first line and separate the word 'feelings':

Feelings,
why do we have to have the cursed things?

Also, the last line is a bit abrupt. Maybe you should change that?
Nevertheless, the poem is good, particularly since it was written at midnight.

Posted 4 Years Ago


HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Haha Thank you!
This is fantastic Lia! I love the two sides and how they are described! Good work!

Posted 4 Years Ago


HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
Coins have two sides and a middle - yet our sense of balance is very, very fragile.

Posted 4 Years Ago


HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Thanks Cris
It's so neat how your poem juxtaposes two different sides of the same idea. :) It's interesting how much feelings can change from one moment to the next. But what would life be without its ups and downs? :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

HipsterPrincess17

4 Years Ago

Haha! Thank you so much, Dana!!! :)

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