Peter

Peter

A Poem by Tiffany Kelley
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Just a silly little piece I wrote for my CW class. :)

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Peter was a man hooked on drugs,

He had it so bad, he looked in his rugs,

He was constantly broke,

Known as the town joke,

But he was always giving free hugs. 

© 2012 Tiffany Kelley


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so sweet

Posted 8 Years Ago


i really like this one! makes me think off all the people i see eveyday that i just want to reach out a giving hand to, but if i do i know they will be mad at me. they want to live that way and i respect that, but it hurts me to see someone a cold winter night die just because they didn't took my hand :/ anyway great poem! one love

Posted 8 Years Ago


Nice little poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I've never quite enjoyed limericks and any other blatantly funny poems (I do love the subtle dry humor of Billy Collins). But this was great. The contrast in the last line is an absolute winner.

I don't know if you count rhythm, but let me alter the poem a little bit according to rhythm (I'm not changing the meaning in any way):

Peter was a man who was hooked on drugs.
He had it so bad, he looked in his rugs;
he was constantly broke,
and known as the town joke,
but he was always giving out free hugs.

Take it, or scrap it. Keep writing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dinesh Sairam

8 Years Ago

Ah, English teachers. I hate them!
Tiffany Kelley

8 Years Ago

Well as an inspiring teacher myself, I hope you may change your opinion or simply make an exception!.. read more
Dinesh Sairam

8 Years Ago

Haha, it's not that I hate the teachers themselves. It's just that they don't help in developing poe.. read more
This is cute! I liked reading it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tiffany Kelley

8 Years Ago

Aw yay!
Entertaining little limerick. The light quality of the final line almost negated the destitution of the previous ones, made for an interesting bit of perspective. Cool little poem. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tiffany Kelley

8 Years Ago

I love the last line. Especially since it is based off true life.
Interesting limerick. I like the "tragedy with a smile" here. Very bittersweet.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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nice limerick! i thought it was just the same as others, but with the last line, it made all the difference. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is great! I love how it shows the different sides of people that others may not see.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Tex
Hahahaha... I love this.

just a wonderful little poem... thank you so much for sharing this.

I just love the contrast in the last line... just great.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tiffany Kelley

8 Years Ago

Haha thank you. My inspiration for "Peter" came from a friend named Rocky who will literally search .. read more
Tex

8 Years Ago

that is how you come up with great writes... take em right out of life...

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Added on November 15, 2012
Last Updated on November 24, 2012
Tags: drugs, hippie, limerick

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Twenty-two years old, confused by her own self-being. Never had the privilege of figuring herself out other than the fact that she has an unhealthy obsession with Literary Arts. As a child, she spen.. more..

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