Suffocation

Suffocation

A Poem by Riv

It's a dam that was built
Long after you were here
Standing strong to the waterfall
Until you were there

That forest down below
Will drown in the fear
Because every word you speak
Is a growl to my ear

© 2015 Riv


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Riv
Monsters lurk here.

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Its natural to withhold when we feel we arent being appreciated - sex is one of the major leverages that is with held in relationships when communication has down or is breaking down. Dams are useful - but only to create new energy for - not as threats to - the valleys below.
Sometimes I feel you write in a fashion that gives greatly but also holds back greatly.
Having said that - I enjoy your writing more than most on here Riv.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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A monster's built up rage is a scary thing to face. Something about the poem being short with tiny type and the setting you put it in gave me the chills. Almost as if it's a warning. Loved it :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Sounds to be a personal write of standing against someone who is always correcting or directing, but does not listen. But it may just be me not focused today. ;)

Posted 4 Years Ago


Nice flow of thoughts led to good ending. The poem left me with the want to know more. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Years Ago


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Dams hold back water, but if knowledge is dammed up life's processes slow to a crawl. Hatred can do the same thing. The one of whom you write has evidently pushed you past that point...leaving you to lament all contact. Whether to allow that person a second chance? It would soften the breaking point. Nice write. take care...dan

Posted 4 Years Ago


There's a lot said in very little here and though that's pretty hard to do for me, you on the other hand did it very well.
Very nice work :D

Posted 4 Years Ago


Its natural to withhold when we feel we arent being appreciated - sex is one of the major leverages that is with held in relationships when communication has down or is breaking down. Dams are useful - but only to create new energy for - not as threats to - the valleys below.
Sometimes I feel you write in a fashion that gives greatly but also holds back greatly.
Having said that - I enjoy your writing more than most on here Riv.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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B
lol
I know
You are extremely expressive


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Riv
Riv

Apple Valley, CA



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Alright, let's do this. My name is Riv or Abby. Either one works. I'm eighteen years old and really love writing poetry on my spare time. While I do write novels and wish to publish one or a few one d.. more..

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