Dandelion

A poem that not only physically, but metaphorically represents an action and associated thoughts that have been recurring throughout my week.

For how long have I been chasing you

You darling little seed?

Watching you fly and dance and soar

Twirling your private ballet in the air.

Oh, how my big clumsy hand seeks you

Grasping at space inches from where you were.

At my movement, your dance soars higher, faster.

Little seed, did I scare you?

This was not my intention.

I wish, I long, I call for freedom like yours;

To soar up high

Twirling, dancing, spinning.

You're looking for a place to settle,

To put down your roots and develop more.

But, I ask you, before you do so

May I hold you a moment?

While I whisper my hopes to you?

I promise to be gentle

And to release you straight after--

Releasing you so you can continue your search in the blue.

Your body is your strength

Your beauty is your white dress.

What is the time, pretty seed fairy?

Two o'clock, three o'clock, four?

Oh, you've wandered back over.

I saw you-- flutter past my nose.

I watch you a moment, contemplate leaving you alone.

But you draw close with your pretty promise.

I try again, I manage

To gently capture you.

A whisper in a breath.

Releasing you into the open blue

With my wishes and hopes.

You do not have to deliver.

But please, lest I fail

Carry them with you

So that they might stay there

Out in the blue.

And grow there, and flower.

To provide hope instead for someone anew.

 

 

--Amber Jayne Spirit Hart, 28.05.10

Author's Note

It is unusual for me to contain so much punctuation in my poetry, but here I felt it was appropriate.

Reviews

[The Old Ashes]

Amber- this was incredible. I really liked it. It flowed really well for me. It may sound silly- but I'm a piano player, and the image this piece painted really is making me want to go sit down and write a song to the emotion, image, and feel of this.
I love the physical and metaphorical connection- I'm a sucker for that kind of writing.
I had noticed with a few of your other pieces I read, they drug on a little too long and we had talked about that a bit-
but this was a perfect length, a mature write, and just... awesome.
Hope you don't mind- gonna send out some read requests for this one.
The only thing I noticed was a few of the ideas seemed to repeat a little bit- but in a way, I think this helped the image along and freshened the readers mind. Repetitive emotion in writing is not always bad.
Keep up the great work girl.
100/100

[John Fitzgerald]

wonderful. the fleeting nature of love and life is captured seemingly efforltessly here, it is accepting of chaos and the nature of beauty as a passing thing.

[Michael X]

you did a really nice job creating the whisful effect and affectionate motion.
there is a lot to this poem- in inspiration. its painted prose.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like this poem. Some poem are easy to understand. I prefer poem like this one that you must read a few times. I like the feel and emotion of your words. We need to feel free and able to do great things. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote