Castles of Wood

Castles of Wood

A Poem by Karina Longo
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My most recent lyricwriting. Let me know what you think :)

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Vases - pumping fast, red graphics inside my heart

Faces - all around but I can’t look into their eyes  

Replicas, a crowd of shadows - I think I know who is who

Ocean of doubts, will you let me show you -

Could you let me show you - you?

 

I could swim in your body; you could take a bath from my tears

We can make it rain together and find a rainbow at the end

Of each other’s fears

We have the entire world but so little of the everlasting time

So why pretend there’s nothing wrong,

Why ignore the emptiness within?

 

Too many issues in your mind and more than tissues make you blind

Please don’t go and kill your dreams, I can’t --

I can’t stop building castles of wood inside my head

Let’s reach out liberty together and breathe life

Because if we keep acting like Romeo and Juliet

Well you know,

We’ll burn

 

If anyone wonders what your armour is made of

A thousand lies won’t be enough to protect you from yourself

Your life is as good as one single glass of cold water in hell

You never learnt, sins and wishes are very different things

 

Where you are now - close your eyes

Where we are now - open your eyes

And if we keep building castles of wood inside our heads

Well you know, we’ll burn

We’ll burn 

© 2011 Karina Longo


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Karina Longo
My most recent lyricwriting. Let me know what you think :)

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"If anyone wonder what is your armour made of
A thousand lies won’t be enough to protect you from yourself
Your life is as good as one single glass of cold water in hell
You never learnt, sins and wishes are very different things"

My favorite stanza from this poem. You have talent to write lyrics that make the reader create one's own tune when they read this. Lyric writing is surely for you. The way you give it a flow is enough to show how talented you are. Thank you for this piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Very intricate and perceptive way of putting things. I find it hard to comment on because..well blame these painkillers or its just so perfectly sewn together that it plays games with your mind. Regardless its a wonderful piece!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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amazing would be such an understatement here..this poem is so onomatopoeic..the words just seem to reverberate and drown your thoughts..going in to my favorites..:) a 100 from me - keep writing..:) :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


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This is amazing. I love the way this written and the imagery. Well penned..xx

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You have quite the talent for writing lyrics, and these in particular are incredibly well done. Your imagery is fantastic, and it flows incredibly well. You did, however have two small mistakes grammatically:

"FInd a rainbow in the end" should be "find a rainbow at the end"

and "if anyone wonder what is your armour made of" should read "if anyone wonders what your armour is made of" or "if anyone wonders "what is your armour made of?"

Posted 9 Years Ago


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You are one of the best poets on here.Brilliant idea.I love the way you move.Bet it is a great song

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I like the poem. It moved like a song and I like the desire of the words. Need to keep building castles of wood inside our heads. Allow us to hold on to hope and dreams. Thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I really want to know how the tune to this goes. I would love to hear it. The poetry in these lyrics comes through super well. I really appreciate all your writing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Enchanting title and kewl write as always... one day I will hear yr words to music.. Im still waiting :P

Posted 9 Years Ago


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This is touching work. You set a massive stage for your thoughts. My imagination ran wild!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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"If anyone wonder what is your armour made of
A thousand lies won’t be enough to protect you from yourself
Your life is as good as one single glass of cold water in hell
You never learnt, sins and wishes are very different things"

My favorite stanza from this poem. You have talent to write lyrics that make the reader create one's own tune when they read this. Lyric writing is surely for you. The way you give it a flow is enough to show how talented you are. Thank you for this piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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