The Last Goodbye

So much for a happy ending

that was for you and I,

no more sweet hello's

you've said your last goodbye.

 

Your words came out so soft

but hit me oh so hard,

they swept me off my feet

you caught me without guard.

 

I stare here at this lifeless phone

wanting to hear your voice,

no matter how much I think

I can't comprehend your choice.

 

You're making a mistake

I thought we were meant to be,

I can still see you in my dreams

but I know you can't see me.

 

Every time I see your face

a tear streams down my cheek,

like a pipe that can't be fixed

always will it leak.

 

I thought we said forever

who knew it would end so soon,

with a hole in my heart

you've left a bleeding wound.

 

I lay down in my barren bed

and see you laying here,

I blink my red and weary eyes

and then you disappear.

 

Just like that you walk away

you leave me all alone,

now I wallow in this place

this broken place called home.

 

You've spoke your last goodbye

and crippled a bleeding heart,

you walked away just like that

and left a painful mark.

 

So much for a happy ending

that was for you and I,

no more sweet hello's

you've said your last goodbye.

 

 

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Goodbyes can be so sad.. but I am learning that a final goodbye is sometimes necessary and can bring closure for two hearts so that new life can spring forth. Your writing hits emotions that everyone has felt at some point in life.. through loss of various degrees.. here you have a dramatic soft spoken final goodbye that hit to the core.. these are sometimes the hardest to part from. Very well portrayed with hard hitting rhythm, rhyme and flow that pierces in a very haunting way. Great writing!

[Beatles9322]

I LOVE THIS! This is fab! However, "You've spoke" should be "You've spoken"....no? Idk. lol. But this is really great and heartfelt. It kind of reminds me of a song called "Almost Lover" by A Fine Frenzy. Google that crap. lol. Really good song, that it. This is a really good poem, too. :D

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Aww I'm sorry. I thought it was sad. I liked it though because I felt like that when my ex broke up with me. I still see him every now and then. I cry myself to sleep at night when I think of him too. I feel horrible everyday. Thanks for sharing though. It was a great write.

[Jessie]

Wow, I love this write your words run deep with emotion great write!

[r]

i really hate goodbyes... they really suck.... this is a great poem though! nice work

[Aimee Mahathy]

Wow, this poem flowed so perfectly! Such a sweet sorrow is echoed in every word.
You've got some simply amazing phrases here! "this broken place called home"~ I loved this one because it kind of switched up the meter of the previous lines and was the perfect continuation of the line before it.
This is amazing! It reminds me a lot of every other relationship I've been in. Everyone has to go through these things, and I've no doubt that there will be a person you will meet who has the power and the will to staunch the bleeding of your wounded heart.

[Astoria Eve]

I absolutely love this. Your rhyming is impeccable. I love the line about tears being a leak from a broken pipe. You use a metaphor about something harsh and industrial for something soft and tender. Brilliant.

Excellent job. Seems like a lot of thought went into this. very heartfelt, sad and introspective. We have all been there, usually more than once (sorry) A great poem that most will relate too. Again excellent job.

[alison13]

Your words came out so soft
but hit me oh so hard,

my favorite lines.. this is such a sad and amazing poem.. it flow gracefully and you can really feel the emotion behind it..good job..

[Katie]

I love the flow of this poem, it does not seemed forced at all. Goodbyes are always difficult but we all have to do it some point in time. Great job.

[wolfman101]

dude an awsome poem, but seriosly made be deppresed it iseems so sad, if this how you feel, cheer up dude