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Ask For Your Hand

Ask For Your Hand

A Poem by LivingDeath

When I come back
I'll ask you for your hand,
Till death do us part
I'll be your loving man.

I've never felt this way before
This love I feel for you,
Tomorrow never came for us
But forever will start new.

I hate this sad prediciment 
Of me getting moved out here,
But remember me and I'll be back
Embracing you close my dear.

I love you more then words can say
And more then I can show,
Believe me when I tell you
I'll travel as far as I need to go.

I'll walk across the desert 
And swim across the sea,
To end up at your doorstep
And let our love be free.

When I come back
I'll ask you for your hand,
Till death do us part
I'll be your loving man.

© 2010 LivingDeath


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this inspiration definitely gives the writer something to fight for...to come back and be that loving man. very romantic and thoughtful. thank you for sharing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


this is really sweet.. your girl friend must be lucky to have a guy like you, any girl would be lucky to have a guy like you...every guy needs to be like you... the world would be a better place.. and your an amazing writer :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Well i haveto say..she is one lucky girl. you have actually left me speechless..as always, you have not failed to impress me..great piece of writing!

Posted 10 Years Ago


this is truly romantic. every girl given with such amazing poem would truly be overwhelmed. good job. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Aww I love this!! Your girlfriend is really lucky to have you. This is beautiful and full of meaning. I can tell you really but a lot of thought into this. Excelent poem.
100/100

Posted 10 Years Ago


First of all, this is an amazing poem! It's very honest and heart-felt. I can feel the truth in your words.
However, there are a couple spelling errors. Just minor~ In the line "And more then I can show" -then- should be -than-. And also, prediciment is spelled predicament. :3
But as I said, this is just lovely. I loved the images inspired in the second to last stanza! This is very beautiful~ Thank you for sharing!

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is filled with a deep sense of love and beauty; the kind of love that lasts for a lifetime. Wonderfully done, flowing in a flawless form.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Another beautifully written and romantic poem. Your emotions are evident in each line. Nicely done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Touching, romantic. I like the feeling of emotion running through this. Very nice.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I LOVE the slant rhyme in this poem at the last stanza, with the "hand" and "man". This is a great poem is a traditional form. You can never go wrong with the traditional form! Great job.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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LivingDeath
LivingDeath

Abbotsford, British Columbia, Canada



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"I'd rather be hated for who I am than loved for who I am not." ~Kurt Cobain. Wasssup guys! I am me, if you want my name, ask me for it. Life in every breath, is my motto. 22 years old, living .. more..

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