Ask For Your Hand

When I come back
I'll ask you for your hand,
Till death do us part
I'll be your loving man.

I've never felt this way before
This love I feel for you,
Tomorrow never came for us
But forever will start new.

I hate this sad prediciment 
Of me getting moved out here,
But remember me and I'll be back
Embracing you close my dear.

I love you more then words can say
And more then I can show,
Believe me when I tell you
I'll travel as far as I need to go.

I'll walk across the desert 
And swim across the sea,
To end up at your doorstep
And let our love be free.

When I come back
I'll ask you for your hand,
Till death do us part
I'll be your loving man.

Reviews

[Liza]

this inspiration definitely gives the writer something to fight for...to come back and be that loving man. very romantic and thoughtful. thank you for sharing.

[carlyraye 96]

this is really sweet.. your girl friend must be lucky to have a guy like you, any girl would be lucky to have a guy like you...every guy needs to be like you... the world would be a better place.. and your an amazing writer :)

[Fallen Angel]

Well i haveto say..she is one lucky girl. you have actually left me speechless..as always, you have not failed to impress me..great piece of writing!

[alison13]

this is truly romantic. every girl given with such amazing poem would truly be overwhelmed. good job. :)

[FireFly15]

Aww I love this!! Your girlfriend is really lucky to have you. This is beautiful and full of meaning. I can tell you really but a lot of thought into this. Excelent poem.
100/100

[Aimee Mahathy]

First of all, this is an amazing poem! It's very honest and heart-felt. I can feel the truth in your words.
However, there are a couple spelling errors. Just minor~ In the line "And more then I can show" -then- should be -than-. And also, prediciment is spelled predicament. :3
But as I said, this is just lovely. I loved the images inspired in the second to last stanza! This is very beautiful~ Thank you for sharing!

[An owl on the moon]

This is filled with a deep sense of love and beauty; the kind of love that lasts for a lifetime. Wonderfully done, flowing in a flawless form.

[Theresa]

Another beautifully written and romantic poem. Your emotions are evident in each line. Nicely done.

Touching, romantic. I like the feeling of emotion running through this. Very nice.

[Alz Alz]

I LOVE the slant rhyme in this poem at the last stanza, with the "hand" and "man". This is a great poem is a traditional form. You can never go wrong with the traditional form! Great job.