Hesitation Proclamation

Hesitation Proclamation

A Poem by LivingDeath

There is some hesitation 
when you speak your proclamation,
of love that shows confusion
was this just a dreamed illusion.

We have such possibilities
not stopped by our inabilities,
we love with such intensity
not shunned from things not meant to be.

So don't let this end inferior 
for our love has grown superior,
I can't just wait nearby
so please don't say that last goodbye.

© 2010 LivingDeath


Author's Note

LivingDeath
I think the last word in the last stanza is the biggest.

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its short, but really gets the message thru!

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is like writing my feelings out. I love it! I just recently had to end a friendship because of something in this

Posted 11 Years Ago


I thought this was a great write. I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


this is good well done

Posted 11 Years Ago


the words are very powerful. and you're right the last line is the biggest. :) watch you punctuation though. only put commas when you would need a pause and a period at the end of a thought. read it all continuously like a paragraph instead of one line after another. just some helpful criticism to help you grow. but other than the grammar of it, the poems really great. keep writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Wow i must say i have read all your poetry and i've seen how your poetry has grown, you are becomming a great poet!

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is great. One in love starts to question the sincerity of the other. Looking from the inside. Great job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Poem is strong. The conversation is very good.To hold two people together takes effort and a lot of give and take. Many lines were powerful. You are correct. Last line told the story. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Ooh, sweetheart, I can relate to this so perfectly! Its shocking! :D
Fantastic job! You're an amazing poet.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I LOVE THIS! I prefer poems with a rhyming scheme that make sense, and have a good wording. It's really great!

Posted 11 Years Ago



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