Hesitation Proclamation

Hesitation Proclamation

A Poem by LivingDeath

There is some hesitation 
when you speak your proclamation,
of love that shows confusion
was this just a dreamed illusion.

We have such possibilities
not stopped by our inabilities,
we love with such intensity
not shunned from things not meant to be.

So don't let this end inferior 
for our love has grown superior,
I can't just wait nearby
so please don't say that last goodbye.

© 2010 LivingDeath


Author's Note

LivingDeath
I think the last word in the last stanza is the biggest.

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Your words seem to speak of that place of confusion in love, wondering and wandering about. Still there is a longing to go on. Beautifully spoken!

Posted 13 Years Ago


My type of rhyming scheme and a well thought out piece. Very good, I like this.

Love isn't my thing, but I can still appreciate this alot.

Well done :-)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very well written. My poems don't usually rhyme but I liked how yours sounded honestly. Not much emotion but very well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is really good. Excellent flow and rhythm. I agree with Not Your Typical Girl in that it could be a little stronger in the emotion/motivation department, but its still good as is. Nice work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


alright, i thought this was nice but could be better. i don't know how to explain though, so sorry for the sucky feedback!
i just feel like this sounded too monotonous. you have to make this piece a little more full of life and a little more motivating, because i feel that that was the intention behind the piece while you were writing.
sorry i couldn't be of a bigger help, I said all I could explain!
keep writing!


Posted 13 Years Ago


great rhyming scheme, enjoyable read

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love the last stanza, its very strong. great poem!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great vocabulary and nice rhyme. It's a great poem! I really like how it gives deep feelings in the poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


i enjoyed the author's intensity and refusal to hold back; fighting for his right to love in its deepest ways and perhaps the recipient may be shielding while lover is attempting to convince that the reality is better than a fantasy.

Posted 13 Years Ago


very heart felt, i think with some of the other things i have read by you i understand perfectly. well done

Posted 13 Years Ago



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LivingDeath

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