Rainstorm...

Rainstorm...

A Poem by Everchanging Disaster
"

Don't think I've ever tried to write a cinquain before so I hope it's not too bad.

"

Cloud

Forbodes, Invites

Pouting, Screaming, Crying

Expelling all it's passions

Storm

 

© 2008 Everchanging Disaster


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Everchanging Disaster
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I like the way that you take on the idea of a "storm"...most people go for "powerful", "strong", "dangerous", but you've gone for "pouting", "crying", and "screaming", which show a different side of things. I rather like looking at a storm as a very powerful child who is throwing a tantrum unknowing of the consequences. Great imagery...nicely done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Congratulations on your win. I didn't even know what a Cinquain was until you read me this one over the phone! BRAVO!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nice job, the intent has a way of drawing the reader to ponder through imagery.
I like the emotional link as compared to rainclouds,
colorful, powerful and creative, thanks for sharing this gem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Your cinquain is magnificent. The descriptives are right on point and creatively woven together escalating the piece toward its conclusion --- storm. I think you did a great job considering it's your first one. Nice work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very nice. i haven't written in this style since i was 12. i love the subject and your choice of words with one slight suggestion

i would consider changing "screaming" to "shouting" as i am assuming you mean to imply thunder and screaming is sharp like lightning. it still works but it seemed a little out of place.

otherwise i loved loved loved your piece. makes me miss monsoon season.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the way that you take on the idea of a "storm"...most people go for "powerful", "strong", "dangerous", but you've gone for "pouting", "crying", and "screaming", which show a different side of things. I rather like looking at a storm as a very powerful child who is throwing a tantrum unknowing of the consequences. Great imagery...nicely done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it. I love experimentation, though I haven't been able to experiment as of late. I love how it's as if the cloud is throwing a fit, then the storm hits. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

To have never written a cinquain before, I believe your first attempt was very successful. I can hear, smell, feel, and see the storm coming. Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow powerful, even in so few a words, i can smell the storm brewing.

Blessed be!
Fallon

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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