Fallen

Yet another feeling terribly sorry for myself poem...No, this is just how I write.

Here I stand alone knocking at deaths door,

my twisted dreams and feelings I don't need 'em anymore.

Shining is the black night blinding me with its blaze

The past is just a distant dream a frightening, useless haze.

 

I feel closer to dying with ever step I get nearer to me,

Why can't they believe this all that I can be?

I think I might be crazy, I am told that all the time.

Discovering my destiny the perfect cliche lie.

 

Crying out for help right now is too much work for me,

Begging for one last breath of air takes too much energy.

I don't feel like living but I am too afraid to die.

I've given up with laughing its easier to cry.

 

I had to cede the inch of life the vultures left for me,

If I wait til morning, I'll disappear completely.

Gone am I forever from this day just fantasy.

I know I am going to miss this place, no one wil miss me.

Author's Note

Ignore grammar problems I know they are littered everywhere! =D

Reviews

[Sincerely, Alex]

I really like this.
"Begging for one last breath of air takes too much energy."
That is my favorite line for some reason.
I like your style of writing.
Very nice.

[Helena]

Sad write of depression and the way one's thoughts
run when in that state. You say you write like this
all the time? Well that's fine, maybe you need to
pen these poems to find purpose in your life. Well
you will and you have. Writing down one's feelings
is hard but you are brave enough to do it, that is
purpose enough. Keep writing my friend and thank
you for sharing this with us ! ~ Helena

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[Passingdaze]

This is a good write man. F**k what people say. Write for YOU my friend. Only you know how you feel and only you know how to convey it in your writing. I loved this poem...It had a lot of feeling and BALLS. You do what you do...And you do it well.

[dark and twisty]

nice....very nice...appeals to my dark and twisty self...heh...i liked it...would probably arrest the reader more without the grammar problems but good nonetheless