Dark Day

Dark Day

A Poem by Lori Brown Boniciolli

Weather - Fall

                                                              Dark Day

                                                  Outside, it is gray again.

                                                  The grounded leaves are rotting,

                                                  and naked trees knife the pregnant sky.
                                                  The wind roars warning,

                                                  stirring the heart of the wounded wood
                                                  which cannot be revived.   

© 2016 Lori Brown Boniciolli

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We stand silent along the paths
mute witnesses to what was
and so softly wish for the could-have-beens
for each became a never-were
and our dreams(?) - just more star"dust".


Posted 3 Years Ago

This is wonderful, like the imagery

Posted 3 Years Ago

I agree with Burleygirl...

That line, "and naked trees knife the pregnant sky", is quite nice. Well done.

Posted 5 Years Ago

This little vignette seems to drone on with unfancy observations described in straightforward terms, which creates a demonstration of how this can feel. No multi-syllabic adjective pile-ups, but just sticking to the simple one-foot-in-front-of-the-other march that's necessary on dark days. Everything is intensely-stated for imagery, but this is a stand-out: "naked trees knife the pregnant sky." This may be about autumn, but it could be a metaphor for depression, too.

Posted 6 Years Ago

You played with words which ended in a very vivid, sharp and solid piece.
The wind roars warning, stirring the heart of the wounded tree - WHAT A LINE.



Posted 6 Years Ago

Great description of the Fall. The Fall, time for our world of nature to rest and sleep. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.

Posted 6 Years Ago

'.. naked trees knife the pregnant sky.'

Words designed to paint or play amazing images and, they do so - beautifully.

Posted 6 Years Ago

of course we are always telling our story, but not to worry about wounds, healing is our strongest suit, and our revival is the song of hosannas

Posted 6 Years Ago

That is a very deep poem:) I really enjoyed it thank you for sharing:)

Posted 7 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Compact and powerful writing. I especially liked your phrase
'naked trees knife the pregnant sky.'
Your images will stay with me for some time.

Posted 7 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Added on March 14, 2016
Last Updated on December 18, 2016

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