Gulmohar

A tribute to the tree called ''Flame of the Jungle' for its vibrance and beauty. Love spring.

Oh blooming Gulmohar tree!
Are you red in anger,
Or scarlet in glee?

Author's Note

Can it be called a real haiku? I actually wanted to depict the beauty of this tree I had been admiring for days. Please review.

Reviews

[Stonz P.]

This has 18 syllables.

The syllable pattern is 5-7-5.
There should be a seasonal reference, a cutting phrase or word.

If you remove 'in' from the second line, you can arrange it as:

" Are you angry red,
Oh blooming Gulmohar tree?
Or scarlet in glee? "

[Penny]

After sometime uploaded it I realised that this piece had 18 syllables but because it was being recieved so well I didn't point it out. I am glad you not only mentioned this but also gave me a helpful suggestion. Thank you.

[Stonz P.]

I just noted you are from Lucknow too. haha..

Well, I do not judge my works by the response people put in here... except for the weaknesses.. most people just want good reviews in return..
Tc

[Penny]

Unlike most others I do criticism sportingly and try to make myself better but call me a hypcrite I usually don't make changes in the poems I have already written.

[Stonz P.]

K .

[Blood Ink Diary]

Indeed, a haiku ! Gulmohar tree -- wah ! Love the probing of anger and glee - how such emotions carry a weight in our lives ! Loved it. Cheers

[Penny]

Thanks a lot shaheen. Glad you liked it. But i must say your reviews too like you are classy:-P

[Blood Ink Diary]

And, I shall stroll by your space during the weekend when I shall some liberal time - as I feel your writings deserve full attention ! Stay happy...

[Penny]

Thank you for your gesture

[Linda alexander]

Definitely not in anger, glee may be, or calling all the eyes towards the flowers so that it can flatter when standing middle of other trees, great write, enjoyed, take care

[Penny]

Thank you Linda. It definitely was eye catching. Its good to see that my creation is also standing out. Thanks again.

[Linda alexander]

You most welcome, take care

[Shirlena]

Well your few words were grand and made me go look it up. It is indeed beautiful.

[Penny]

Thanks a lot. Snd yes some of the words WERE grand, I just learnt them less than 1 month ago in english literature class..

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good one..

Keep Sharing..

Good Wishes!!

[Penny]

Thank you. Glad you liked it.

[stars are far]

this is a well done personification for the tree..
:)very original

[Penny]

Thanks... it feels good to be appreciated.

[stars are far]

thats true..my pleasure :)

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. I love how you personified the tree with those emotions. This was creative indeed... :).....

[Penny]

Yet again you have inspired me. Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you kindly...You are welcome...:).....................

[Saddam]

Gulmohar ke ped hamare ghar se kuch door station ke pass padta hai, mujhe bahar jyada ghumna pasand nahi hai par jab un pedon par phool aa jate hai main wahi ja kar samay bitata hun. Nai idea bhi aa jate hai. Perfect tribute dear friend.

[Penny]

Shukriya. Sach mein in phulon ko dekhkar mann khil uthta hai, college mein kuch galat ho par samne wale ped ki surkhi dekh ke sara gussa shant ho jata hai.

[Saddam]

sahi kah rahe ho friend....jadu hota hai.

[Avinash]

Gulmohar is one of favorite trees. When the flowers come on it you can barely see leaves.
And your short poem asks some really genuine questions only a beautiful mind can ask.

[Penny]

Tenkew and yeah I like autumn more than spring but this tree it was just teasing me with its beauty. I just could not resist. Thnx for the review.

[Rehan Roy]

'Red in anger..scarlet in glee' Succint expression for 'Flare' tree. You have depicted it so beautifully.

[Penny]

O.M.G even your reviews are poetic, they just rhyme:-D. Thnx buddy.

[Rehan Roy]

Haha...It's my pleasure.