His drug

He watches her as she sips her bourbon,
Takes in the elegance of her sway
Looks into her eyes as she smiles.

Realizing her precense is intoxicating,
He finds himself slowly fading.
Reflecting on what's happening,
He drinks yet another drink.

He trembles with the need of want,
And embraces the fact that she's
Just a fleeting thought that would forever
Haunt his mind.

Reviews

[Justin]

that was really great :) ) it tells a great story in short form :)

[BL]

You have captured a moment perfectly

[Phil]

wow. you are just good . nice and brief

[Chloie Kato]

This poem captures nicely the idea of wanting something you can't have. It's short but very relevant and applicable to real life. I like how the poem first presents the persona's obsession and finishes with his sad fate. Well done.

[Lostangel]

I'm still thinking on this one. I feel as if something is missing!
Thank you :)