Dark eyes

I wonder if you preferred 

to see my sad eyes full of fear, 

small dark eyes whisper 

‘don’t leave me... 

I need you near’. 

I wonder if you despised

my eyes when full and bright, 

as bright eyes light their own path 

and their own story, 

they would write 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is a strong metaphor for how it can be when someone is stifled in a relationship. Your words are brief, but conjure up the many times I've watched someone dissed over & over until they seemingly have no self-esteem left, but when he/she does finally get some nerve, all efforts to become strong again are sabotaged. The eyes tell it all. Look back thru photos & see how someone was in a "blah" period of life by how dull his/her eyes look, & vice versa. Your seemingly simple little blurb sparks a huge scenario from real life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Laura Kate]

It's true Margie, and it is sad to see. Thanks for your feedback, it is much appreciated :)

[R.E. Ray]

As you've captured so well in your poem, some people don't want to see anyone happy. They thrive on pain, misery and drama, and if they don't find it, they often create it. Maybe they like "dark eyes" because they can see their own sad reflections. A well-written poem that says more than is written here.

[Laura Kate]

That is so true, you are so right with your analogy - I hadn't thought about that. Perhaps that is how they most feel self, looking into a reflection they recognise. Thank you for sharing your thoughts :)

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Good write up, backed up by an emotional feeling of doubt.
You really makes the point, for no one knows which love is blue or black.

Thumb up!

[Laura Kate]

Thank you Kay! Much appreciated
Laura

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i see abuse here...she is so full of life and dance, and he wants to see her afraid and sitting and keep her under his thumb...or fist, more like it.
and until she is free, her eyes will not be able to tell their story.
j.

[Laura Kate]

Thank you for your review Jacob, and for your amazing ability to read between the lines,,
Laura

[Chris Shaw]

Now there's food for thought in this little poem. I know for a fact that some men fear more independent minded women. Not generalising but that's where you took me. Show fear and some will walk all over you. That:s where you took me with this well conveyed write.

Chris

[Laura Kate]

Hi Chris, thank you for sharing your thoughts on this poem, it was very interesting to read your interpretation. Best wishes as always, Laura

[Jade]

This seem a little emotional, but well written

[Laura Kate]

Thank you Brandie :)