Insecure

Insecure

- By Love.Stained

Feeling so unsure

Like I don't know reality,

from a mere dream

Feeling so insecure

Like no day is tomorrow,

until you turn to leave

Feeling so afraid

If you must fade in the morning,

I won't go to sleep

Feeling so hollow

The non-existent memories,

they're for me to keep. 

Author's Note

Wow, first poem I've written in an age. Tips?

Reviews

[TheOne&Only]

First, poem in awhile? I must say pretty darn good my dear!

"Feeling so hollow
The non-existent memories,
they're for me to keep"

LOVED those LINES...

[hannahjchin]

Feeling so afraid
If you must fade in the morning,
I won't go to sleep

beautiful stanza

[Hello, Goodbye]

The point is precise.. your usage of brevity is effective.. and the feeling is well felt.

[Muse]

A very fluid write. To make it flow even more just leave out the commas, remember that in poetry at times LESS is more. My only tip, keep writing! :)

[diannesam]

I could almost sing this poem, it works so well, and flows perfectly. I love it