Untitled (for now.)

As They Were;
Just Him&Her.
Lovers from the start.
Two people; One heart.
Now they are one ; a complete whole.
One body; One Soul.
Their love meets no calculation.
Expressing their love? No hesitation.
Driving Down the road of love, it shall be tough.
But They'll make it,even though forever is not long enough.
Their feelings are so strong that -Love- isn't even the right word.
That love? Bigger than Noah&Allie's, "If you're a bird, I'm a bird."
The love is Forever&Eternity
The love is for That guy&she.

Author's Note

I was bored, and in a good mood. Judge however you'd like, but I know i'm bad, so there's really no need to point it out. :P

Reviews

[Emily]

This is quite nice. It is wonderful, in this day in age to be able to write of romance in a good, positive light. The concept of soul mates stretches back to the Greeks when men and women were combined into a perfect unit of four arms and four legs and two heads. It was a time when the gods were affeared that these perfect individuals could and would destroy them. So they spit these creatures in twain and left them to wander, trying to find the perfect half to make the perfect whole. It is nice to know that there is a positive look on life somewhere.

The only actual, little, problem is the last two words. "that guy&she " is awkward and grammatically incorrect. It unfortunately halts the poem and doesn't let it end the way it should. You can say: "That guy & girl." which would be a better flow and a better ending point. :-) just a little thing can and will change so much about the ending to this piece.

Do not put yourself down in your Author's note. You write well, and the concepts behind your writing are very nice. Be proud of what you create, and be willing to have others tell you you're wonderful and give you little hints on how to be even better :-)