Take the Plunge

I've just gone through a painful break-up - can you tell?

Teetering on the edge for what feels like months,
Wondering whether this is the right thing to do.
Suddenly a wave of bravery comes over me,
And I take the plunge.
 
It feels freezing, and it hits me hard,
Rip-tearing at the flesh on my limbs,
Snatching every bit of breath from my lungs,
So that I feel like I’m being vacuum-packed.

Panic sets in, and my thoughts turn solely to self-preservation.
How do I make this easier?
I can’t.
I’ve jumped in. The damage is done.

But now I realise that I’m dry,
And that it had to end.

Reviews

[LOfCharlemagne]

Your metaphors and personifications make this poem jump to life! I love how you used vivid and lively descriptions such as "Rip tearing at the flesh on my limbs". Its beautiful and extremely effective in every way. Your way of communicating the theme is brilliant as well, and is felt throughout the entire poem. My only advice would to be him trying to find a way to at least "Make this easier" to add a little more drama to an already amazing story. I loved this piece to death, and I find that it is truly a great poem. :)

[Chris M]

I can't tell you what it means to have you say such nice things about my first piece of writing for years. Thank you so much! I think you make a great point - maybe I'll review and add a couple more stanzas at some point... Thanks again.

[LOfCharlemagne]

You are very welcome! I loved your poem, you should wirite a few more and send them to a literary magazine. They love work lIke this.