Dehydrated Musings

Trying to be inspired

Some annoying madman

Has crawled into my ear

And is beating my skull with a croquet mallet.

I believe my lack of water

Must have conjured him

To torture me into sipping some Gatorade.

My pen taps on my paper

I long to spin eloquent words

Into a breathtaking, masterful poem.

Instead, my thoughts speak in a drone

Limply spinning in circles

Nothing worthwhile is rising to the top, just bubbles.

My body is a steamy summer noon

With no breeze and plenty of languid flies

I want to kill them, but then I'd just be slapping myself.

Author's Note

I think it speaks for itself...I was really bored and trying to write something deep and meaningful, and it just wasn't working, so the result was this.

Reviews

[Ben Taylor]

And in vocalizing your feeling of failure, you have created something rather beautiful.

"Limply spinning in circles" is such an awesome way to describe your un-profound thoughts xD
Also, "My body is a steamy summer noon" is a pretty epic line as well.
Well written--it always amuses me when people write about their lack of inspiration and wind up with something exquisite. :)

[An owl on the moon]

Your musings are filled with the emotion of existence... the thoughts that trail the mind and move us to ponder... to sit still or move on... You've painted a brilliant aura of feeling here.

[M Garcia]

nicely written

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Corky write. An interesting read.

Hah! It's kind of funny, in a way. I love the way it flows together and the word "madman"! I love that word, for what reason I will never know, but it just sounds so... delicious! The fact that you were writing about your little writers block and made a beautiful poem really makes me happy. Wonderful job! I certainly understand the feeling of writers block. I love it!

[Chris]

This poem described writers block with perfection.

In weaving the failed words, and sewing them together came a piece of odd poetic beauty and eloquence.

[xSummer'sPatient]

I absolutely love the first stanza. That is one of the most amazing and amazingly peculiar introductions I have ever seen in a poem XD. I really like this, I think anyone and everyone who has an account on this website can easily relate to and appreciate this. I know I can! I really like the message behind this and you conveyed it perfectly. I don't think I would change anything here. Keep it up!

[Mariko]

Been there... This poem captured it perfectly... especially that last stanza. You could probably get rid of the rest of the poem and leave just that and it would stand just as strong - if not stronger.

... Way to turn the emptiness into something radically truthful and real.

[Daydreamer54]

LOl, i like how poetic this sounds and I like the imagery. I know how it feels to be dehydrated, ur vision gets fuzzy and yur lightheaded feeling like ur gonna die, well AT LEAST i FEEL THATR WAY ANYWAY. GREAT WRITE!

[Celeste21]

I think this would really appeal to a younger audience because it is really funny! I think that you should write more like it.