Undone

Undone

A Poem by Love Well Spent
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This is a battle I have not yet won, seeking the truth mixed in with the lies...

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Undone


I am slowly becoming undone

Although I know my journey has just begun

Is this a joke you think is fun?

This is a battle I have not yet won

Seeking the truth mixed in with the lies

I am slowly becoming undone

I find myself constantly hiding from the sun

Running away from the life we use to share

Is this a joke you think is fun?

I don't know what I have become

Because of you everything has gone all wrong

I am slowly becoming undone

I am tired of this race I have yet to run

And like a butterfly my wings are broken

Is this a joke you think is fun?

I gave you my heart, you gave me nothing

When you're up, I feel myself falling

I am slowly becoming undone

Is this a joke you think is fun?


© 2012 Love Well Spent


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It truly describes how being heartbroken is. I like the the repeating of "Is this a joke you think is fun?" It shows that the poet can't believe what's going on. Excellent work.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sounds like whoever the poet was talking to was a real jerk

Posted 11 Years Ago


a beautiful heart break poem , loved it. heart breaks are painful and sad , but they make wonderful poems :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


Great poem, full of pathos, the anaphora played a great part in this :) Just one thing? Do you accept corrections? I don't want to offend anyone so let me ask it first (there's a couple of verses I'd like to propose a little change on in order to fit better the metrica) :)
Great job =D

Posted 11 Years Ago


The heartbreak of unrequited love and the pain it causes is so devastating. I love this

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Hauntingly beautiful

Posted 11 Years Ago


I liked this its heartbreaking I'm sorry if anyone hurt u like this but I do like the poem alot make more while the feeling still last

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on December 29, 2012
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Love Well Spent
Love Well Spent

Asheville, NC



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