Joyful Fish

Diving into the cool water
I feel refreshed and energized
The chills spur me onwards

Front crawl I use my S-pull
Perfect form
I was in the water as a fetus
And swam early when I was born

Years crafted my arms and legs
To kick and pull through
My lungs I owe to the pool as well

I love it
I am a joyful fish
Freedom as I propel forwards

Athleticism
In it's greatest form
When the lactic acid, stiffness and pain
Give way to smooth energy

Reviews

[SuzieQ]

Nice writing! I did enjoy this poem!

[Meliss@k]

*breathes* much better... Thank you for this breath of fresh air.

[Luke L]

hahaha it's okay, sometimes I forget to breathe as well, usually when I'm really pissed on trying to concentrate really hard on something

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I have always said that in my opinion there is no greater athlete than a swimmer in terms of muscle tone and general "form"... I think it is the lengthening of muscle and the general aerobic ability that becomes second nature which makes it so beautiful--you can always tell a swimmer and a runner from any other kind of athelte.

I love the way that you brought this back to the womb...how we all began as "fish" in a sense, which if looked at metaphorically, is a nod toward evolution. We all crawl out of a watery womb into this earth, and perhaps we crawled out of a watery womb as a species... Thought provoking...

[Luke L]

thank you :) I love how you create something and just go with it... and then other people give you feedback and break down why it's awesome, and you didn't even think about it that way, you just created it by intuition... thank you for giving your own meaning to it :).

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

haha Well, you're welcome...sometimes I get carried away.

[Luke L]

it's fine get carried away :) I like it! You are encouraged :p

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Oh no, encouraging my getting carried away could result in unanticipated things...you have been warned...but I'll make sure to speak in metaphor so that it doesn't scare anyone away...

[Luke L]

haha don't be scared homie ;)