Walking Home At Midnight

My tire was slashed on my bike
So after work at midnight
I walked it all the way home

Of course I was livid at first
But being alone wandering
In this beautiful, clear time of day
Made me feel much better

The quiet, tranquil energy around me
Only a few scattered raccoons and felines
Here and there scurrying
Like growing teenagers
To the fridge for a late night snack

The gentle whir of my bike
As I push it along
Almost meditative
As it forces me to look at my life
But not in the harsh way
That having my senses overwhelmed with feedback
Does so

There is something gorgeous
About the casual, autumn leaf illumination
Of street lights
On this tuesday

The relaxing cool air
Firing off my brain
Sparking smooth, focused thoughts
That go nowhere
But I'm not worried

The relaxing cool air
Sends the slow shivers down my back
And up my spine
I love that feeling
I that cold it feels good somehow
Energizing my triple As
In the whispering british columbia air

Takes me back
To a time before the rat race
When I was just a high schooler
Only looking to enjoy myself
Getting back home from parties on salt spring island
Walking by myself for hours
For there was no one around to hitchhike a ride with

The concrete forest somehow lovely in this light
Shadowed perfectly sexy
Like teenage girls who mastered photoshop and face paint
Disguising the dirt and the cracks that show themselves in the daylight

This moment of forced relaxation
I should take more often willingly

Reviews

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

WOW, very W.H. Auden. I really appreciate your almost narrative poetic approach. Finally someone with good metaphors.

"The concrete forest somehow lovely in this light
Shadowed perfectly sexy
Like teenage girls who mastered photoshop and face paint
Disguising the dirt and the cracks that show themselves in the daylight"

Lived for this stanza, excellent.

[Luke L]

Thank you very much :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Splendid and really magnificent work my friend :)

Loved these lines :)

The gentle whir of my bike
As I push it along
Almost meditative
As it forces me to look at my life
But not in the harsh way
That having my senses overwhelmed with feedback
Does so

There is something gorgeous
About the casual, autumn leaf illumination
Of street lights
On this tuesday

The relaxing cool air
Firing off my brain
Sparking smooth, focused thoughts
That go nowhere
But I'm not worried

Cheers!
Singh :)

[Luke L]

thanks man, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Vikrantsingh]

Yes i did mate :)

[Mike Cole]

Very descriptive and very good at telling a story I really enjoyed reading what you wrote you are very talented and should keep it up!

[Luke L]

thanks man :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

It's truly amazing what we miss, by not slowing down. We are in such a hurry these days...good to have poetry like this to wrap around us, to remind us.

Nice meeting you, Luke!

My best,
Kelly

[Luke L]

thank you very much, Kelly :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

I absolutely love this piece, Luke. You use senses, description, imagery and the wonderful meditation as a metaphor for this entire piece. These are my fave lines:

Only a few scattered raccoons and felines
Here and there scurrying
Like growing teenagers
To the fridge for a late night snack

The concrete forest somehow lovely in this light
Shadowed perfectly sexy
Like teenage girls who mastered photoshop and face paint
Disguising the dirt and the cracks that show themselves in the daylight

That is some amazing imagery! Going to RR this one to my friends.

[Luke L]

thank you very much, Lori :)

[kublakhan27]

Very picturesque piece with vivid imagery you can really feel...nicely done :)

[Luke L]

thanks man

[poetdoug]

"The gentle whir of my bike as I push it along--almost meditative." I love the way you introduce your story with this sound. In fact, it seemed to 'whir' the whole rest of the time I read your colorful words.
I like it when this happens. In fact, in writing, I try to add sounds, or words that indicate sounds,
smell, taste, feeling, etc. I think this is a part of our meditating that you are alluding to. Thanks for giving us the chance to meditate along with you Luke, my friend! Great job!

[Luke L]

thanks man, appreciate it :)

[Meliss@k]

Ah, taking time to "smell the roses", even if it WAS unexpcted. Beautiful imagery!

[Luke L]

thanks, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Prritiy]

nice journey to n fro from present to past and back, liked the way nature n surroundings are described.