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Man I feel lazy and tired and I don't want to work on anything

But f**k it I'm going to grind on

Ow my body hurts, my head aches

I don't want to keep going f**k it I want to give it up

But push push through it

Until

Yes I'm in the zone

And this is the most rewarding the doing

The work, the creation

Man I'm feeling it this makes me much happier

Than relaxation ever could

I am so lazy sometimes and it's hard to start the momentum

But when I start going it just goes on forever and I'm loving it

The inspiration sparking off rapid fire so much

I can't even catch it all

But I'm not worried

One day I will keep going forever

One day when there is a healthy way

Not to sleep, eat or use the bathroom

I will just create forever

Then it will be shown

The levels that are truly possible

My imagination and REM sleep

In the material plane

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

This poem has the makings of an amazing novel. What would happen if you indeed got your wish. For some reason I am reminded of Midas and his golden touch. On the poem, I like the progression I see in character and his travels from listlessness and self-loathing to a creature of artistic power and then to, dare-i-say, a robot who doesn't even need to use the bathroom. Would save trees. lol. The last two lines are beyond intriguing and are almost a poem in of itself. A lot to ponder here. Thank you, Luke. Great write.

[Pryde Foltz]

BTW, I gave you 99/100 and so ignore the grade above.

[Luke L]

man you really seem to see things in what I do creatively that I don't even, thank you very much for your continual encouragement. You give me energy to continue when I get tired. Thank you so much :)

[Pryde Foltz]

It is a pleasure. The reward is in the doing.

[Prritiy]

I am so lazy sometimes and it's hard to start the momentum
But when I start going it just goes on forever and I'm loving it
The inspiration sparking off rapid fire so much
I can't even catch it all
But I'm not worried
.
.
My imagination and REM sleep
In the material plane

rightly remarked once we shed off our lazyness and start enjoying whatever we do there is no stopping....

best wishes

[AmandaN]

I totally agree with Pryde this would be a great idea for a book/film.
I enjoyed immensely .

[Luke L]

thank you, Amanda :)

[Ohhhwillow]

This sang to me as more of a journal than a poem, despite it's clear stanza form. Have you tried keeping a journal? It may work for you! Your closing couplet were the ballast of this piece, and on those I commend you. Keep it up Luke

[Luke L]

Ya I could see that, I don't really like to write in particular forms... I might write a song that looks like a poem or a poem that partially looks like a story, I just kind of write to get the idea out and don't focus on sticking to a particular form

[CriticalxxAngel]

I really enjoyed it and I think it really captured our emotions when we're in the zone of writing and never want it to stop no matter what.

[Luke L]

absolutely, thank you very much for the comment :)

[kublakhan27]

To Pryde's point below, I think this is a piece that transcends poetry...it could be the basis for a novel or short story, but I think this is tailor-made for a stage or coffee house...I know you said you like to write direct but there's plenty of room for interpretation here, especially when applied to a dramatic delivery...just a great piece of writing, well done :)

[Luke L]

hey people take it how they take it, it's alright with me if they make it out to be something more awesome than how I view it :p.