Work Rewards

Work Rewards

A Poem by Luke L

Man I feel lazy and tired and I don't want to work on anything
But f**k it I'm going to grind on
Ow my body hurts, my head aches
I don't want to keep going f**k it I want to give it up
But push push through it
Until

Yes I'm in the zone
And this is the most rewarding the doing
The work, the creation
Man I'm feeling it this makes me much happier
Than relaxation ever could

I am so lazy sometimes and it's hard to start the momentum
But when I start going it just goes on forever and I'm loving it
The inspiration sparking off rapid fire so much
I can't even catch it all
But I'm not worried

One day I will keep going forever
One day when there is a healthy way
Not to sleep, eat or use the bathroom
I will just create forever
Then it will be shown
The levels that are truly possible

My imagination and REM sleep
In the material plane

© 2013 Luke L


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This poem has the makings of an amazing novel. What would happen if you indeed got your wish. For some reason I am reminded of Midas and his golden touch. On the poem, I like the progression I see in character and his travels from listlessness and self-loathing to a creature of artistic power and then to, dare-i-say, a robot who doesn't even need to use the bathroom. Would save trees. lol. The last two lines are beyond intriguing and are almost a poem in of itself. A lot to ponder here. Thank you, Luke. Great write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pryde Foltz

8 Years Ago

BTW, I gave you 99/100 and so ignore the grade above.
Luke L

8 Years Ago

man you really seem to see things in what I do creatively that I don't even, thank you very much for.. read more
Pryde Foltz

8 Years Ago

It is a pleasure. The reward is in the doing.



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I am so lazy sometimes and it's hard to start the momentum
But when I start going it just goes on forever and I'm loving it
The inspiration sparking off rapid fire so much
I can't even catch it all
But I'm not worried
.
.
My imagination and REM sleep
In the material plane

rightly remarked once we shed off our lazyness and start enjoying whatever we do there is no stopping....

best wishes

Posted 8 Years Ago


I totally agree with Pryde this would be a great idea for a book/film.
I enjoyed immensely .

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Luke L

8 Years Ago

thank you, Amanda :)
This sang to me as more of a journal than a poem, despite it's clear stanza form. Have you tried keeping a journal? It may work for you! Your closing couplet were the ballast of this piece, and on those I commend you. Keep it up Luke

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Luke L

8 Years Ago

Ya I could see that, I don't really like to write in particular forms... I might write a song that l.. read more
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I really enjoyed it and I think it really captured our emotions when we're in the zone of writing and never want it to stop no matter what.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Luke L

8 Years Ago

absolutely, thank you very much for the comment :)
To Pryde's point below, I think this is a piece that transcends poetry...it could be the basis for a novel or short story, but I think this is tailor-made for a stage or coffee house...I know you said you like to write direct but there's plenty of room for interpretation here, especially when applied to a dramatic delivery...just a great piece of writing, well done :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Luke L

8 Years Ago

hey people take it how they take it, it's alright with me if they make it out to be something more a.. read more
This poem has the makings of an amazing novel. What would happen if you indeed got your wish. For some reason I am reminded of Midas and his golden touch. On the poem, I like the progression I see in character and his travels from listlessness and self-loathing to a creature of artistic power and then to, dare-i-say, a robot who doesn't even need to use the bathroom. Would save trees. lol. The last two lines are beyond intriguing and are almost a poem in of itself. A lot to ponder here. Thank you, Luke. Great write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pryde Foltz

8 Years Ago

BTW, I gave you 99/100 and so ignore the grade above.
Luke L

8 Years Ago

man you really seem to see things in what I do creatively that I don't even, thank you very much for.. read more
Pryde Foltz

8 Years Ago

It is a pleasure. The reward is in the doing.

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Luke L
Luke L

Victoria, British Columbia, Canada



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I love music. I love writing erotic stories and poems. Follow me on Twitter: @LukeLesterMusic Here is my blog: http://luketalkstuff.blogspot.ca/ I write random things on there and link .. more..

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