Stuck In The Mud

I went for a drive

Had a full tank of gas when I started

Going camping in a british columbian forest

And on the way it started to rain

I drove uphill

On my way

Dragging tires behind me

With s****y front wheel drive

In my beater

I made it onto a trail

It was a little worn down

But I didn't think much of it

Till I started to sink

Then panic started setting in

I revved my engine

I pushed at the hunk of metal and gas

I even got others to help

But to no avail

I got stuck in the mud

And I'm trying so hard

To pull myself out of the mud

But the foundation is hard to find

I'd like to drive on the perfect pavement

But for now I'm stuck in the mud

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Reviews

[Missphit]

Clever metaphor for an obviously different situation entirely. I can see through the lines at you grasping for more and even with kind words and help from friends and strangers you go along a dangerous slippery path because that is where the object of your desire lies. Although you start out with a full tank of gas aka energy and hope it only burns up as your frustration heightens. Very well balanced read. Excellent use of words! Bravo

[Luke L]

thank you very much :)

[AmandaN]

Haha :-) Cleverly written,I enjoyed thanks

[Riding the Rainbow]

very good piece..the mud and trying to pull yourself out..it recalls life and trying to go survive..maybe asking for help..
well done..

[FlatLineBeauty]

very nice Luke. I loved picture you painted in my mind

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

"I'd like to drive on the perfect pavement
But for now I'm stuck in the mud."

Were you irritated when you wrote this? For some reasons, I had imagined you smiling. Also these two lines speak volumes. Nicely done!:x

[Plume de flamme]

Your writing certainly isn't stuck in the mud. Well done.

[Luke L]

thank you very much :)

[Michael G. Smith]

Excellent capture of a slice of ordinary life.

[Luke L]

thanks man appreciate that

[bobc]

L...I'm usually commenting on a poem if I'm asked to read. For some reason, I've looked at this several times and nothing comes to me. Wish I could be helpful...sorry...bobc

[Luke L]

don't worry about man, if you find there is nothing to say then say nothing it's all good

[Baby Ricochet]

I've been stuck in the mud, the sand, the surf and flipped off a berm onto my side. I wasn't always driving though

[Luke L]

ha fair enough, what's a berm?

[Pryde Foltz]

A muddy good write. lol. Quite awesome the way you take an everyday thing and give metaphorical meaning to spare.

[Luke L]

thank you very much :)