6 Million lost souls and 60 happy teenagers

a poem about my time in Berlin.

I am writing this poem 

                        with an ordinary pen.

Black ink runs down to the tip of the writing tool.

                                   blood shoots to the tips of my fingers.

The pen and my right hand amalgamate into each other.

                                           we are united, we are one, we are a living organism.

                    One brain.....one pen.....one piece of paper.....

                      one poem.

I am looking at the youth of Berlin!

groups of teenagers are running through the holocaust memorial. They are playing tag, laughing, screaming with joy.....67 years before, 6 million screamed also....but that time it was not with joy, but with anguish .

         

The pen and my right hand amalgamate into each other.

                                           we are united, we are one, we are a living organism.

 ©LukeRitta

Reviews

[Enigma]

Interesting. I somehow like the abrupt shift in the scene. It is like gazing at the paper and contemplating and then raising your eyes up to gaze at the teenagers and look back at the past. Then transporting back to the present -to the teenagers, and your pen. Well penned. :)

[Liana]

I remember winding my way through that memorial and the heavy energy that lingers between the big grey concrete columns... I like your observations and the lines dedicated to hand and pen...nice

[Coyote Poetry]

I don't know. In a holocaust memorial. I went to a few in Europe. I felt death and pain. I would have distaste for anyone laughing and playing tag where 6-10 million people lost their life. Your thoughts are interesting in the poem. Last line could open the door to conversation. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[reflectingus]

This has been written rather beautiful, powerful emotions elicited, of all that anguish, who we unite, yet we're different, and the last lines just gives the perfect ending. I love how you shared your thoughts in a creative way, well done.

[Sarah Nicole Nadler]

wow, very thought-evoking!

[Empirik]

This is super deep. :)

[Cathy Wattam]

I like this. Clear, precise and truthful. Well written.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

This is a clear message, and it was very well written. I think you done an excellent job :)


Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A clear and well written message indeed.

[joshua deathdealer]

Outstanding. I love the message here.

[Aly Jones]

This poem is unique in its own way. :) I like it a lot.