Intoxicated Love

Intoxicated Love

A Poem by Luke Ritta
"

a poem about a first encounter.

"
 

Her golden hair

                     Smells of cinnamon.

                          I am transfixed by her soft skin.

 

She holds my hand.

                      Our fingers connect like

                     jigsaw pieces.

 

She whispers into my left ear,

her lime blossom perfume glides up my nose.

 

The crowded bar that we are in suddenly

                                   burst into green flames. I see and hear

                                                               No one apart the women sitting in front of me.

 

I am inside a vacuum of a green haze,

                                            Surrounded by the aromas

                              Of lime blossom, cinnamon

                                              

   and the sweet pungent feminine smell    

                                                        Of a woman.


 ©LukeRitta

© 2012 Luke Ritta


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i really like "fingers connect like jigsaw puzzles"

that is wonderful...i like the entire mood of this piece...and there is such a beautiful truth in a first meeting with someone like this...the rest of the world just gets shut out...and she is the only thing we see, hear, feel...that is it.

nice scenario painted here...

jacob

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is terrific! I really enjoyed this romantic and warm piece of work!
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed! Maybe I'm slow but I don't understand
the use of green, please do fill me in, lol:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


As mentioned before, your use of green is very original. I honestly adore your work, every time I start reading one of your pieces I am transported into a bubble of aromas and textures filled with memories that aren't my own. Transcendent. I simply feel compelled to thank you for the journey.

Posted 6 Years Ago


i really like "fingers connect like jigsaw puzzles"

that is wonderful...i like the entire mood of this piece...and there is such a beautiful truth in a first meeting with someone like this...the rest of the world just gets shut out...and she is the only thing we see, hear, feel...that is it.

nice scenario painted here...

jacob

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Golden encounter with perfumed romance.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I find your use of the color green to be very original and compelling. I love how the form, language, and diction all add to the intoxicating feel of the poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So visual, I can smell it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the senses are so wonderfully engaged in this delightful expression of love! Such lovely poems I am reading today! well done!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An ideal and v fragrant female indeed.....I felt virtually convinced, as if engaged in a vivid aromatic romance...so well put together almost edible and I don't feel warrants further editing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very touching and personal experience. You captured this situation so nice and neat like. Great imagery.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Romantic and flow is on point

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 24, 2012
Last Updated on August 16, 2012
Tags: Love, smells, man, women, bar, drinking

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Luke Ritta
Luke Ritta

London, United Kingdom



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Hi, I am 26 and from London. I love writing short stories, poems and novels. My writing is a bit like Jack Kerouac and Ernest Hemingway. I love reading classic Literature, from Tolstoy to Proust, I .. more..

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