from the moment
the burning tongue of dawn
licks the sky i hunger for your touch when red arrows of dusk
pierce through clouds i crave your kiss
the musky breeze whispers
to enflamed palm fronds
an inferno is sparked and so the yearning continues naughty stars of night
incite passion
my soliloquy is never - changing mon amour, pour aujourd'hui et
pour toujours
This is well place passion on the page, which could've been skin the way this quivers, sweats and stretches along a skeletal structure. You can tell you put your soul in it too flesh these words...great anatomy of nature for such a circulation is inspiration...great piece
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What a fantastic review this is. I thank you so much. Lydi**
"naughty stars of night
incite passion
my soliloquy is never - changing"~ When something this bright burns into your heart it never changes...
it only burns more... intense...
from the moment
the burning tongue of dawn
licks the sky
i hunger for your touch
when red arrows of dusk
pierce through clouds
i crave your kiss
that is simply sublime writing Lydi!
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10 Years Ago
Thank you very much, Tammy. I appreciate your review. Lydi**
Oh Lydi, this is truly exquisite, amazingly structured poem, with the imagery of passionate longings
subtlety boiling beneath the surface...i love:
the musky breeze whispers
to enflamed palm fronds
an inferno is sparked
and so the yearning continues
naughty stars of night
incite passion
my soliloquy is never - changing
mon amour, pour aujourd'hui et pour toujours
simply brilliant...thank you for sharing! pen on :)
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10 Years Ago
Thanks so much for stopping by, Barrie. I appreciate it. Lydi**
10 Years Ago
you're very welcome, Lydi, and the pleasure was all mine. wish everyone would stop writing
suc.. read moreyou're very welcome, Lydi, and the pleasure was all mine. wish everyone would stop writing
such amazing poetry though lol :)
I think when we read good poetry, our own poetry improves. Don't sell yourself short...your poetry .. read moreI think when we read good poetry, our own poetry improves. Don't sell yourself short...your poetry is very good.
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aw thank you, Lydi...for your sweet, encouraging words, I truly appreciate that! I agree but then i.. read moreaw thank you, Lydi...for your sweet, encouraging words, I truly appreciate that! I agree but then i'm afraid everyone elses' words are going to seep into my subconscious. :)
It's true, what you said about the palm fronds...if the sunlight catches them just right, they do appear to be "enflamed". [Of course, only those living in California or Florida would know this.]
Hope you have a wonderful autumn weekend!
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Autumn really changes nothing here in South Florida....you know that. The palm fronds look the same.. read moreAutumn really changes nothing here in South Florida....you know that. The palm fronds look the same all year round and the grass stays green. Thanks for your review....and I remembered....GARY BENFIELD!!! lydi**